Regarding the question of how one might make it better:

I believe that this is the foundation of all developments in all areas. How to improve on a pen, on a package, on a vehicle... Just because this is a produced script, it doesn't mean we should stop asking how it might be better. I think it's a worthy exercise, but it's also a difficult one because as people have mentioned, once you start changing things-- (well they didn't say exactly this) but things change...

You might wind up changing what audience it's geared for and the entire tone of the film.

If I were writing it, I would probably add comedy into it and then it wouldn't matter if we had new creatures coming out of the blue. The audience would forgive us if they could feel that they were in with us on the joke and perhaps have the characters addressing the stupidity of some things.

But then, this would obviously be a different film wouldn't it?

I would gear it to make it more acceptable for a younger audience
by losing the swears.

I think that the premise and the fact that it's about time travel are the
two Aces up this one's sleeve. The very notion of encountering
one's own dead body and being stuck in a time loop-- it's a winning
premise.

And now, the end is near;
And so I face the final curtain.
My friend, Ill say it clear,
Ill state my case, of which I'm certain.

Ive lived a life that's full.
Ive traveled each and every highway;
And more, much more than this,
I did it my way.

Regrets, Ive had a few;
But then again, too few to mention.
I did what I had to do
And saw it through without exemption.

I planned each charted course;
Each careful step along the byway,
But more, much more than this,
I did it my way.

Yes, there were times, I'm sure you knew
When I bit off more than I could chew.
But through it all, when there was doubt,
I ate it up and spit it out.
I faced it all and I stood tall;
And did it my way.

Ive loved, Ive laughed and cried.
Ive had my fill; my share of losing.
And now, as tears subside,
I find it all so amusing.

To think I did all that;
And may I say - not in a shy way,
No, oh no not me,
I did it my way.

For what is a man, what has he got?
If not himself, then he has naught.
To say the things he truly feels;
And not the words of one who kneels.
The record shows I took the blows -
And did it my way!

Paul Anka

Hey Verdugo, thanks so much for this info.  This all makes sense now (at least more sense) to me.

I thought this was already in production and was being released next Summer as a big "Summer Blockbuster".  Because of that, I thought the budget was going to be $50-$75 million (if not more). And based on that, I predicted a commercial flop.  It should be able to pull in $30 Million or so here at the NABO if it's done up right for sure.

Interesting point about Mummy 3. I saw it and actually told my girlfriend that based on it's $175 Million budget, it was going to be a flop here, but would most likely do very well in Asia, based on Jet Li and Michelle Yio.  I see that it definitely did, and made a little more $200 Million over it's budget.  It was not a good movie by any means though (and I really liked Mummy 1 and Mummy 2).

Your comments about the dialogue make sense also, if it's indeed hoping for a big box office over seas, might as well keep things simple.

And finally, I'm very happy to hear that they are going through another rewrite.  If you've read these posts, you know that I sure think it needs it.  I was under the assumption that the script we read was a final, or near final version, and that they had already begun filming.  Oops, my bad.

Anyway, thanks again for filling us in on the details.  Take care.

You OK there, Sandra?

What's with the "My Way" lyrics?

Quoted from Breanne Mattson Just for the record, GM and I totally worked all that out. I took some of his comments personally and responded with personal remarks. I’ve now removed those remarks from the offending post and I publicly apologize to GM over it. There’s always a better way to handle a situation.

Breanne, you did not have to do that. You have gone and made me break my promise about not writing on this thread anymore. But thanks, It has always been my biggest flaw in life, I take things to personally and react far too quickly. It takes a lot of effort daily in the "real world" to not let it get in the way of my professional life and I do manage to keep a lid on it most of the time, I would not have a job otherwise! But here on the forum sometimes it is just far too easy to be distracted by other things and hammer out a quick message without thinking about the consequences of what i am writing.

I do apologize to you and to everybody else here for dragging the thread downward somewhat.

Pia, you are doing a great job of organizing this, don't let a couple of hot heads make you think you aren't.

So while I am here...  

Verdugo, thanks for your input and sorry you arrived in the middle of a domestic. You should have called first!

Now you are a member it would be great if you could stick around and offer your thoughts from time to time.

Cheers

Verdugo,

Ah! So Mr Shelton was the leak...We'll have to take care of that!

All kidding aside.  Thanks for the input and sorry that you had to meet the script club in such tumultuous times.  Please do stick around and comment on some of the future scripts the club reads.

Me,

I agree. This is done.  I vote for unproduced scripts only in the future.  

To Verdugo,

I have to say I think your post is awesome. Thank you so much for taking the time to come here and help us out.


Breanne

Quoted from Dreamscale You OK there, Sandra? What's with the "My Way" lyrics?

I thought we'd come to the END of this one LOL!!!!

Sandra

Quoted from Sandra Elstree. I thought we'd come to the END of this one LOL!!!!

So, wouldn't "The End" have been more appropriate and Apocalypse Now-y?

For shame, Sandra, for shame.  And here I thought you were the Lizard Queen.

Big smiles, Mike!!!!

But I love Frank Sinatra!

This script should have him singing in it! All the while Daya has the mosquito monster going at her eye.

Would it be an infringement on copyright if we pooled our resources and wrote an action thriller called "Mosquito Monsters from Malaria?"

Sandra

Breanne's and bert's pro script discussion disappeared and I can never find the original SC thread, so....

What do you people want to do next?

Personally I would prefer an unproduced script by an active member...  Even if we don't get as many readers, it's still more "helpful" I think for all our members.

Maybe we can do 3 member's scripts then one pro script and then back to 3 member scripts...

Just an idea...

Let me know what you think.  

Quoted from Grandma Bear Breanne's and bert's pro script discussion disappeared…

Pia, I deleted it because….

1) I felt I might be stepping on your toes here. I was afraid it would be too much for people to try and participate in that and the Script Club both and that it might hurt the Script Club.

2) There is a script review section already here and I was thinking that might be the better place to discuss things. I don’t know.

3) I was afraid it would become more extensive than I could handle hosting. I see how stressed you are here -- haha.


Breanne

Breanne

I was interested in that discussion and hope that you will recreate the thread.

I was concerned about diminishing the discussions about our unproduced scripts. After all, once we've managed to write a feature, what could be better than having it discussed in detail?

So, in order not to dilute this script discussion deal... How about one unproduced script then one hot spec script in production?

Quoted from mcornetto Breanne I was interested in that discussion and hope that you will recreate the thread.

So be it….Jedi.



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