Tracksheet is updated. Next up is the Reaper.

This shouldn't take too long. Ripley already went over my scenes. All I'm doing is revising and stuff. So all I need to do is get in touch with Sandra to work on Cordie's dream.

Cornetto, I can't ever get anything bolded here for some reason. Could you bold my headings when I post my scenes please?

--Julio

Sure, once you post it - I'll bold it.

I enjoy how this is going. I think it's better than the killer game. lol. I guess I'm going to start writing now. I wonder what can I come up? hmmmm.

It's much better than the Killer game..not to say that wasn't fun though.  This is better because it's no longer virgin territory.  It's also much more serious, and defined.

I think it's great and Michael needs to be thanked and appreciated.

MBC, I'm completely impressed by your post.

It's moving us along really well! I really like how you've clarified just "why" these particular people are still alive and not the others because this is what the audience would be asking. This is critical and you've answered it by explaining that there's a common thread in all of them which are the dreams and that they're being called.

Also, you've moved us at ground level through the territory showing us the dire straights of the situation.

Your introduction of Eddy is superb. The fact that there's something off with him is planted and it pulls us along.

Way to go!!!

Sandra

Thanks Sandra   Your post is greatly appreciated.  

I felt like a number of people would not be impressed...so I was a little worried about the post as there were no explosions, etc. A rather tame post...but it does get one thinking.  

I wanted it to deal with the more practical elements of the story.  Things I would want to know about...the use of communication, getting better prepared in an outdoor store...the world is in survival mode...additionally, why are they alive, what is drawing|calling them?  Those are the things I would be asking if I were watching, so I wanted to address them.

Thanks again.   ~m~

Hey all

Happy to see you are all enjoying the new game format.  

I've been very pleased to see the writing quality being consistently maintained during this exercise.  You are all doing quite well and it wouldn't be the game it is without each and every one of you.

Cheers,

Michael

Quoted from mcornetto Hey all Happy to see you are all enjoying the new game format.   I've been very pleased to see the writing quality being consistently maintained during this exercise.  You are all doing quite well and it wouldn't be the game it is without each and every one of you. Cheers, Michael

Michael, you've created an excellent premise. I know you worked tirelessly with the rules and formulating a track sheet and all kinds of research.

As Dreamscale has already stated, you are to be commended for all of this. It's a really hard job to keep up with it all; so thank YOU!

Right now, I've got the honor of working with Julio and I've got to say, he's wrote a FANTASTIC SCENE! I kept thinking to myself, "Wow! He's really done a good job!" You'll see when it's posted.

This is a real challenge for me working at this point. There's just a lot of work to work with.

Right now I think there's an excellent variance happening in the writing between the action scenes that are high power and moving, the more, as MBC girl just stated, tame, but expository scenes and image related dream scenes.

It would be a good exercise I think after the game, to create a spreadsheet labeling and numbering the kinds of scenes: A = Action CI= Character Illumination etc... and seeing which ones are back-to-back.

We could even go so far as labeling the mood and flavor of each scene.

Perhaps everyone could be tasked with a particular job in the study of the first draft of Shiva and bring problems and solutions to the table.

That would be another game.

Tomorrow, I'm going to read the script through again when I'm fresh and make some notes.

I'll try not to be too long, but this isn't easy.

Sandra

I want to add my agreement and Kudo's to Michael as well.  I can only imagine holding down a job, and working us through all this, not to mention all the communication that goes on - on the back end.  We're probably like a lot of little children with our endless questions

This is a wonderful exercise in writing...while it has a lot of "open for interpretation" aspects...it also has the main backbone of the story line to keep us grounded.

You have done a FINE job Cornetto and we all appreciate your investment of time and energy into our "together" project!

Love your little Christmas lights! Twinkle Twinkle   

'Kay guys. We're almost done. We should be posting this early tomorrow (more like later today considering it's 1:05 am over here.lol)

--Julio

Merry Christmas everyone,

I've just had to post my effort to Michael so I'm hoping it will be okay come judgement day.  I'll be gone tomorrow and I don't think there'll be internet access.

EDIT: I've just read the rules properly.  I think my effort is a little over-the-top.  Oops.  Maybe mine could be a dream Michael?

All the best,


Javier

I'm sure Julio will be posting part two of his scene very soon. He's done an excellent job!

Sandra

and the plot thickens!

Scene 2 is posted