Hugh

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I just upped ya both.  And I tend to agree with the voluminous story issues that have been brought up.  The guy has an enjoyable, highly readable style, but the script seems many drafts away from being ready to go.  And the budget for this thing would be a daunting prospect for producers.

Just upped both Kev and Brett’s comments.

Some great and insightful comments by Kev on the script :

I enjoyed the relationship between Norman and Jake, thought it was the best in story but your ideas for it were really good on how to improve it.

And of course I agree with your comment about Oprah, this really stuck out to me when finished. It lacked something and needs more to show why Jack is so devoted.

Great input though, Kev. I really hope that the author is listening and takes some of it on board.

As I’m pretty new to Scriptshadow – how do you actually comment? Do you have to sign up or something? I recently joined the mailing list but does that mean I can comment?

I think just sign in there, Steve. That's how I ended up on the mailing list. I commented a couple times and got added. I didn't even know there was a mailing list until I got my first email.

The Norman/Jake relationship is key. And I can understand they might not want to mess with it. I was just thinking that this script needs to be thriller or comedy, and it doesn't seem to be comedy. So I was looking for ways to increase the tension.

I've had some suspicion about who the real writer of that script is, but just a theory. And how things went yesterday in the comments section only reinforced that notion. Probably just a crazy theory.

Carson feels adamant about the project like he did with Disciple Program so he's still going to support this script. I think that's one thing we writers got to do with our scripts. Find that person who's adamant about our project like Carson.

I just got bogged down the descriptions. At times, I was like wtf?

Congrats to the author and Carson.

Gabe

Quoted from CoopBazinga Great input though, Kev. I really hope that the author is listening and takes some of it on board. As I’m pretty new to Scriptshadow – how do you actually comment? Do you have to sign up or something? I recently joined the mailing list but does that mean I can comment?

I agree Kev knocked the stuffing out of that script in the coverage.
No reason for me to examine the guts after that!
So, I tried to contribute in another way.
I'm glad eventually others chimed in on that movie.

As to comments, there's two ways you can do it.
You can post on your own with your e-mail addy. Or...
You can sign up with Disqus, which a lot of blogs use.

I signed up because it makes it easier to use my 'lil devil of an avatar.

Regards,
E.D.

I must be stupid. I can't find that review.  

lol. He didn't review it, but he said we could discuss it in yesterday's book excerpt. So there is much discussion below.

Anyone SS'rs brave enough to submit something yet?

Quoted from Hugh Hoyland Anyone SS'rs brave enough to submit something yet?

I think Ryan's script was up there once?

I remember seeing Stevie's script as well for the AF competition where he picked the twenty recent scripts sent to him.

I think the trick to get on the five that he sends out each week is to send your submission a day before he sends out the email. I remember Carson mentioned once that he only goes through the first page and picks the best loglines from there.

Thanks for the info. I'm new to that site so I really dont know the in's and outs about how it works. But I'll look for those two scripts over there.

So its kind of like a lottery then eh? I suppose it's best to keep "re-sending" your logline again and again to have a chance to catch his eye. (Not that I have anything to send, just wondered if anyone here has ever done it lol).

Quoted from leitskev I think just sign in there, Steve. That's how I ended up on the mailing list. I commented a couple times and got added. I didn't even know there was a mailing list until I got my first email.

Quoted from Electric Dreamer As to comments, there's two ways you can do it. You can post on your own with your e-mail addy. Or... You can sign up with Disqus, which a lot of blogs use. I signed up because it makes it easier to use my 'lil devil of an avatar. Regards, E.D.

Muchas gracias, gentlemen. Had a peek at Disqus over the weekend and signed up.

Has anyone read his book yet?

I know a lot of writers here are horror writers so might be good for some to check out today's script. I think today's script Dracula Year Zero is pretty good. Only up to page 34, but the writers' style is crisp and clean for a historical piece on dracula - doesn't get dragged down by the details. A good read imo.

Quoted from Grandma Bear Has anyone read his book yet?

I was waiting for the hard copy.
But I guess that's going to be another month.  

Dunno if I want to download that Kindle app onto my PC.
Could be the start of me overspending on e-books!

E.D.