I had an idea about how to re-approach the concept of The Great War.
Disqus ate my first attempt to comment.
So, I'm posting the rewrite here first to make sure I don't lose it again!

I dig the concept, but the execution left me baffled.
It was overstuffed with characters. No outstanding traits.
And I was completely lost by page fifteen.

That being said, I think there's a good story or two in this idea...
The original stream of consciousness spitball of this is lost in the bowels of Disqus.

Forgive me, if my summation seems abrupt...

I say go all Kyle Reese on the story.
One person can go back and save Hitler. That's it.
They need to restore Hitler's timeline at all costs.

Here's where you FLIP the Kyle Reese/Sarah Connor dynamic...
The protag has to protect someone he HATES.

Do they start to sympathize with young Hitler?
Can a perceived monster actually be humanized in his youth?
That human story within that concept interests me.

I think there's a lot of nifty ways that narrative could go.

Regards,
E.D.

If I may steal a little thunder from the OWC for a moment.

I wanted to let all you SS vets know something I couldn't have done without you...
The new draft of Clone Wife made the Scriptshadow Amateur Friday candidate list.

I'm humbled and proud to have learned through your generosity.
And I hope to continue to hone my craft and always have fun.

I re-engineered the bulk of the story.
Reshaping the indie dramedy into a studio sized Rom/Com.

Never would I had the courage to get this far on my own.
So, I thank you from the bottom of my newly oversized heart.
It's gonna be a bumpy week for me.

Back to your regularly unscheduled OWCness.

Toasty Regards,
Brett

I just saw your script Brett, great job, man! I'll be sure to give this a read and tell Carson how great it is.

But seriously, good achievement.

Well done, Brett!

I haven't read this prev. so just downloaded the draft from the email. Looking forward to having a read. Will get back to you... and then Carson.

Libby

Congrats Brett!! Reads a lot more fun now. You've done a great job with it!!  

That's great, Brett. Congrats to you.

Congrats Brett.

Going to read this first. Yes, it's bias so what. lol.

Gabe

Saw the email before I even came here this morning. Hopefully we can encourage a Shadow read!

I don't think that'll be difficult.    

BTW - I've already read the re-tooled version.  It's got a different, less "indie" take - but love it.  

Congrats, Brett.

Really good news – great stuff.

It seems like you made the right decision to as you said “bite the bullet” and submit a script.

Good luck with it.

Thats great E.D.!

Good choice to submit it! Will be on the lookout for it to.

Best of luck!

HGW

Congrats ED! I saw Carson's new batch and saw a familiar title. I'll check it out. Good luck!

The logline is fantastic. High concept one-liner.

Quoted from CoopBazinga Congrats, Brett. Really good news – great stuff. It seems like you made the right decision to as you said “bite the bullet” and submit a script. Good luck with it.

Hey Coop!

Thanks for the kind thoughts.
Well "bite the bullet" happens when your partner gets laid off for Christmas.
Necessity is a great motivator. And so is paying the rent!
So, out the door that script went!

And I'm writing on another one all weekend.
Shining up a holiday nugget for eager feature producers to devour.
So, I've got sugar plums and ScriptShadows boucing around my brain 24/7.

No time for love, Dr. Jones.
I gotta write THE END and fast!

Cheers,
E.D.

Quoted from Grandma Bear Congrats Brett!! Reads a lot more fun now. You've done a great job with it!!

Thanks, Pia!
Without your honest criticisms, I wouldn't have been so tough on myself.
You were among the first to tell me here, that I didn,t totally suck.
And you know what? I think I'm starting to believe you. Nutty Swede.

BTW, did you get my note about our meeting for today?
Gotta push off until Monday. Hope that's OK.
I'm all about the candy canes and sugar plums until I write THE END again.
And trying to not let my brain melt with yayness over that Shadowy nomination.

So, thanks for being a tough broad!

Regards,
Brett

Much gratitude and gooey hearts to all well wishers!!!

I'd been writing most of the night. About to go to bed...
But I checked e-mail one last time... And then I saw it.

That Scriptshadow e-mail kept me bouncing around for another three hours!
Figured when that list of ten hopefuls hit the blog on Thursday that it wasn't my time.
Surprise.
Clone Wife slid right in there... along with a cage fighting script.
Talk about your narrative diversity! LOL.

My eyes are watering up, you guys really get me in the heart with your generosity.
Or, I'm allergic to my neighbor's new cat.

Time to crack open Final Draft and kill some brain cells!
You guys are top shelf. I'm lucky to be here.

Regards,
Brett