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DustinBowcot
Posted: June 20th, 2019, 4:19pm Report to Moderator
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Quoted from leitskev


Absolutely true. Though there are different motives one can have for participating. For me it's an exercise, something that I hope might force a different way of thinking about story. I also hope to gain something new from reading the scripts. I really could care less about the scoring...but I do value the comments.


I'm the opposite. I don't care about the comments, only the scoring. I write for the OWC. I suppose positive comments equal good scores, so, in that, I do care about the comments.
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I see this sometimes and I think the writer is doing themselves a disservice. It becomes obvious, never sways anyone's position anyway.  It's a poor strategy.


I always comment on my own, I try to keep it in the same tone as the majority of the reviews and still find issues to point out on my own script, as I would with anyone else’s. I always work either up or down the list and come to my script when I come to it. I have also always gone back and deleted my comment after the round is done, I’ve done this for practically every OWC and WT script I've ever written for. Just my way.


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Quoted from Warren


I always comment on my own, I try to keep it in the same tone as the majority of the reviews and still find issues to point out on my own script, as I would with anyone else’s. I always work either up or down the list and come to my script when I come to it. I have also always gone back and deleted my comment after the round is done, I’ve done this for practically every OWC and WT script I've ever written for. Just my way.


It's a good way


My Scripts can all be seen here:

http://dlambertson.wix.com/scripts
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Gary, Chris had an amazing system set up. We even looked into using the code he wrote to be used here. Chris was onboard with that and so was Don. Turns out the code was very archaic and not compatible with the website Don runs. I even went as far as looking for someone to write a new program so we could continue a MP style thing here, but at that time, everyone told me it would be 1-2 weeks and those coders aren't cheap. Perhaps nowadays finding someone in a country where the dollars goes further it wouldn't be as expensive, but it would still be asking Don to spend money. Therefore, that idea has never gone further.


I PM'ed you, Pia.


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... and looking forward to the upcoming pepper grinder in a trunk challenge

Very funny, Alex.  

I've been trying to train myself with creating stories around wild incongruous scenarios and combos. Next one is:

Genre: Action
Location: Zoo
Object: Spaghetti

Just mucking about. I am not a Maths person.




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Quoted from LC

I've been trying to train myself with creating stories around wild incongruous scenarios and combos. Next one is:

Genre: Action
Location: Zoo
Object: Spaghetti

Just mucking about. I am not a Maths person.



It writes itself!


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Quoted from LC


Genre: Action
Location: Zoo
Object: Spaghetti

Just mucking about. I am not a Maths person.



I'm in. When's the script due?
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Quoted from Zack
I'm in. When's the script due?

Two hours from now. Go!  



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Quoted from LC

I've been trying to train myself with creating stories around wild incongruous scenarios and combos. Next one is:

Genre: Action
Location: Zoo
Object: Spaghetti



I had a spare 20 minutes so, challenge accepted lol

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FADE IN:

EXT. ZOO - CHIMPANZEE ENCLOSURE - DAY

SLIMBO, a very rotund female chimp sits on the floor next to
a large horizontal tyre.

DOBO, a smaller male chimp, gently pushes Slimbo from behind
until she is comfortably up against the tyre. He pulls on old
white cloth from under his arm and places it over her lap.

Dobo rushes off screen - returns with a large bark plate
covered in spaghetti and a single meatball. He gently places
it on the tyre in front of his date.

HOO HOO HOO - Slimbo flails her arms in excitement
accidentally knocks the plate.

A HUFF from Slimbo as she watches the meatball roll onto the floor
and through the enclosure fence.

Dobo and Slimbo stare at each other. She nods for him to go
and get it.

With both hands on the enclosure fence, Dobo pulls it apart,
scrambles through the newly created hole.

NEE-YAW-NEE-YAW. Alarms, flashing lights, screams from Zoo visitors.

Dobo reaches out for the meatball when 5 rangers surround
him, tranquillizers ready. He looks up, grins "It's on".

SERIES OF SHOTS

1) Surrounding rangers fire their weapons. Dobo leaps in the
air, twists, turns, the tranquillizers only hit other rangers

2) More rangers throw and hold a large net on Dobo. He spins
as fast as he can until the rangers, and the net, fly off.

3) Dobo holds the meatball in his hand. A ranger slaps it off
- immediately regrets it as Dobo launches him into the Lion
enclosure.

4) Dobo smiles, dusts off his hands, as beaten rangers lie
all around him.

BACK TO SCENE

Dobo places the meatball back on top of spaghetti mountain.

A tranquillizer thumps into Dobo's arm. He drops to the
ground.

HOO HOO HEE - Slimbo laughs, stuffs her face with spaghetti.

FADE OUT.


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Two steps to writing a good screenplay:
1) Write a bad one
2) Fix it
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Slimbo! Bit of an ironic name, huh?  

Valiant effort, Matty! The only thing I'd add is that they escaped from the zoo.

And, you stay at the top of the leaderboard cause you were the only one to attempt this most difficult feat.  


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Quoted from Matthew Taylor


I had a spare 20 minutes so, challenge accepted lol

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Ever read Great Apes by Will Self?
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Quoted from DustinBowcot


Ever read Great Apes by Will Self?


I have not - Just googled it, sounds like an absurdly interesting plot lol


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Two steps to writing a good screenplay:
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DustinBowcot
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Quoted from Matthew Taylor


I have not - Just googled it, sounds like an absurdly interesting plot lol


I read it a long time ago. I found it hilarious back then. Your little short reminded me of it.
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Quoted from Matthew Taylor


I had a spare 20 minutes so, challenge accepted lol

-------

FADE IN:

EXT. ZOO - CHIMPANZEE ENCLOSURE - DAY

SLIMBO, a very rotund female chimp sits on the floor next to
a large horizontal tyre.

DOBO, a smaller male chimp, gently pushes Slimbo from behind
until she is comfortably up against the tyre. He pulls on old
white cloth from under his arm and places it over her lap.

Dobo rushes off screen - returns with a large bark plate
covered in spaghetti and a single meatball. He gently places
it on the tyre in front of his date.

HOO HOO HOO - Slimbo flails her arms in excitement
accidentally knocks the plate.

A HUFF from Slimbo as she watches the meatball roll onto the floor
and through the enclosure fence.

Dobo and Slimbo stare at each other. She nods for him to go
and get it.

With both hands on the enclosure fence, Dobo pulls it apart,
scrambles through the newly created hole.

NEE-YAW-NEE-YAW. Alarms, flashing lights, screams from Zoo visitors.

Dobo reaches out for the meatball when 5 rangers surround
him, tranquillizers ready. He looks up, grins "It's on".

SERIES OF SHOTS

1) Surrounding rangers fire their weapons. Dobo leaps in the
air, twists, turns, the tranquillizers only hit other rangers

2) More rangers throw and hold a large net on Dobo. He spins
as fast as he can until the rangers, and the net, fly off.

3) Dobo holds the meatball in his hand. A ranger slaps it off
- immediately regrets it as Dobo launches him into the Lion
enclosure.

4) Dobo smiles, dusts off his hands, as beaten rangers lie
all around him.

BACK TO SCENE

Dobo places the meatball back on top of spaghetti mountain.

A tranquillizer thumps into Dobo's arm. He drops to the
ground.

HOO HOO HEE - Slimbo laughs, stuffs her face with spaghetti.

FADE OUT.


Someone call Pixar.


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Quoted from ReneC


Someone call Pixar.


Is that to warn them not to buy my stuff lol I mean, I ended the film with Slimbo eating the spaghetti, not the meatball Dobo fought so hard for, i'm such an amateur lol


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