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Absolutely true. Though there are different motives one can have for participating. For me it's an exercise, something that I hope might force a different way of thinking about story. I also hope to gain something new from reading the scripts. I really could care less about the scoring...but I do value the comments.
I'm the opposite. I don't care about the comments, only the scoring. I write for the OWC. I suppose positive comments equal good scores, so, in that, I do care about the comments.
I see this sometimes and I think the writer is doing themselves a disservice. It becomes obvious, never sways anyone's position anyway. It's a poor strategy.
I always comment on my own, I try to keep it in the same tone as the majority of the reviews and still find issues to point out on my own script, as I would with anyone else’s. I always work either up or down the list and come to my script when I come to it. I have also always gone back and deleted my comment after the round is done, I’ve done this for practically every OWC and WT script I've ever written for. Just my way.
I always comment on my own, I try to keep it in the same tone as the majority of the reviews and still find issues to point out on my own script, as I would with anyone else’s. I always work either up or down the list and come to my script when I come to it. I have also always gone back and deleted my comment after the round is done, I’ve done this for practically every OWC and WT script I've ever written for. Just my way.
Gary, Chris had an amazing system set up. We even looked into using the code he wrote to be used here. Chris was onboard with that and so was Don. Turns out the code was very archaic and not compatible with the website Don runs. I even went as far as looking for someone to write a new program so we could continue a MP style thing here, but at that time, everyone told me it would be 1-2 weeks and those coders aren't cheap. Perhaps nowadays finding someone in a country where the dollars goes further it wouldn't be as expensive, but it would still be asking Don to spend money. Therefore, that idea has never gone further.
I've been trying to train myself with creating stories around wild incongruous scenarios and combos. Next one is:
Genre: Action Location: Zoo Object: Spaghetti
I had a spare 20 minutes so, challenge accepted lol
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FADE IN:
EXT. ZOO - CHIMPANZEE ENCLOSURE - DAY
SLIMBO, a very rotund female chimp sits on the floor next to a large horizontal tyre.
DOBO, a smaller male chimp, gently pushes Slimbo from behind until she is comfortably up against the tyre. He pulls on old white cloth from under his arm and places it over her lap.
Dobo rushes off screen - returns with a large bark plate covered in spaghetti and a single meatball. He gently places it on the tyre in front of his date.
HOO HOO HOO - Slimbo flails her arms in excitement accidentally knocks the plate.
A HUFF from Slimbo as she watches the meatball roll onto the floor and through the enclosure fence.
Dobo and Slimbo stare at each other. She nods for him to go and get it.
With both hands on the enclosure fence, Dobo pulls it apart, scrambles through the newly created hole.
NEE-YAW-NEE-YAW. Alarms, flashing lights, screams from Zoo visitors.
Dobo reaches out for the meatball when 5 rangers surround him, tranquillizers ready. He looks up, grins "It's on".
SERIES OF SHOTS
1) Surrounding rangers fire their weapons. Dobo leaps in the air, twists, turns, the tranquillizers only hit other rangers
2) More rangers throw and hold a large net on Dobo. He spins as fast as he can until the rangers, and the net, fly off.
3) Dobo holds the meatball in his hand. A ranger slaps it off - immediately regrets it as Dobo launches him into the Lion enclosure.
4) Dobo smiles, dusts off his hands, as beaten rangers lie all around him.
BACK TO SCENE
Dobo places the meatball back on top of spaghetti mountain.
A tranquillizer thumps into Dobo's arm. He drops to the ground.
HOO HOO HEE - Slimbo laughs, stuffs her face with spaghetti.
I had a spare 20 minutes so, challenge accepted lol
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FADE IN:
EXT. ZOO - CHIMPANZEE ENCLOSURE - DAY
SLIMBO, a very rotund female chimp sits on the floor next to a large horizontal tyre.
DOBO, a smaller male chimp, gently pushes Slimbo from behind until she is comfortably up against the tyre. He pulls on old white cloth from under his arm and places it over her lap.
Dobo rushes off screen - returns with a large bark plate covered in spaghetti and a single meatball. He gently places it on the tyre in front of his date.
HOO HOO HOO - Slimbo flails her arms in excitement accidentally knocks the plate.
A HUFF from Slimbo as she watches the meatball roll onto the floor and through the enclosure fence.
Dobo and Slimbo stare at each other. She nods for him to go and get it.
With both hands on the enclosure fence, Dobo pulls it apart, scrambles through the newly created hole.
NEE-YAW-NEE-YAW. Alarms, flashing lights, screams from Zoo visitors.
Dobo reaches out for the meatball when 5 rangers surround him, tranquillizers ready. He looks up, grins "It's on".
SERIES OF SHOTS
1) Surrounding rangers fire their weapons. Dobo leaps in the air, twists, turns, the tranquillizers only hit other rangers
2) More rangers throw and hold a large net on Dobo. He spins as fast as he can until the rangers, and the net, fly off.
3) Dobo holds the meatball in his hand. A ranger slaps it off - immediately regrets it as Dobo launches him into the Lion enclosure.
4) Dobo smiles, dusts off his hands, as beaten rangers lie all around him.
BACK TO SCENE
Dobo places the meatball back on top of spaghetti mountain.
A tranquillizer thumps into Dobo's arm. He drops to the ground.
HOO HOO HEE - Slimbo laughs, stuffs her face with spaghetti.
Is that to warn them not to buy my stuff lol I mean, I ended the film with Slimbo eating the spaghetti, not the meatball Dobo fought so hard for, i'm such an amateur lol
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Very funny, Alex. 
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