All screenplays on the simplyscripts.com and simplyscripts.net domain are copyrighted to their respective authors. All rights reserved. This screenplaymay not be used or reproduced for any purpose including educational purposes without the expressed written permission of the author.
Hmm, lots of veiled implications here. Mysterious bags too. I was hoping someone climbing around the train high jink would happen. So yay! Add in a nice high drop to spice things up. And voila, instant death trap.
I like how things "look". but don't explain what happened. I assumed it was all too subtle for an official kill, IMO. All this gives the next bloke lots of potential to tinker with. Nice work.
Regards, E.D.
LATEST NEWS CineVita Films is producing a short based on my new feature!
Ah, sorry about that. Newbitis. Will PM you who is dead.
Well, on one hand, if I is dead, that gives M one big character change motive to not only find his killer, but use that pistol he gave her. If he's not dead, I'm inclined to think he set up the look of the room.
I just want to say, Darren, I'm glad with what you did with the use/non use of the cell phone. I was actually thinking about using a cell phone in a scene, but I honestly didn't know if it would work on a train or not, and of course, that would depend on the train's location; so I thought, I'll leave it.
I'm trying to get caught up here. Just finished Sandra's post. Did I read this correctly...D, M, and X have a Menage in Sleeper car 6? Or am I merely imagining this?
If they did, what's with the dialogue about "Trick"? Also, why did D sport a "sinister grin"?, and then, M "goes equally evil"?
Did I misread something, or is this all correct?
I'm very confused, BTW...even reading Daz's version with names. I wish Daz chose actual male and female names - Using "Peter" for a female character is tough to visualize...
Doing the best I can. Please let me know about this ASAP, so I can move onto Daz's post and then crank something out myself.
I'm trying to get caught up here. Just finished Sandra's post. Did I read this correctly...D, M, and X have a Menage in Sleeper car 6? Or am I merely imagining this?
If they did, what's with the dialogue about "Trick"? Also, why did D sport a "sinister grin"?, and then, M "goes equally evil"?
Did I misread something, or is this all correct?
I'm very confused, BTW...even reading Daz's version with names. I wish Daz chose actual male and female names - Using "Peter" for a female character is tough to visualize...
Doing the best I can. Please let me know about this ASAP, so I can move onto Daz's post and then crank something out myself.
Thanks.
Jeff,
In my post, X might have wanted that, yes, but I didn't write it. I did write M using D as ammo (her sex appeal) to pull A away from P because M's mission is to get P hooked back up with her Ex (because her Ex's partner - big business shit is on the decline without his (P's Ex's) savvy and P's Ex is really fucked up, suicidal).
I don't know if it made it into the post, have to re-check, but the question was, A isn't going to want D near him now after she kicked him like that. Is he? Would he? Does she have enough "ammo"? That could really be a good scene if written up.
Anyways, it appears that X, D, and M don't really wanna use a gun. The love I was showing was more warm fuzzies, but girls get that way, bro's don't always take it that way.
I've also alluded to the fact that the camera D has is more than just a camera. That could be cool. And my use of "Trick" is I guess Canadian slang. We say something's "trick", when it's really cool, but I guess you could take it in other ways.
The fly charm was a reference to A, who I thought planted it there with a fresh bottle of wine perhaps? But the wine bottle wasn't shown. Maybe a gift from A, as a reminder of the squashed fly incident? A definite "A" reference.
The fly charm was a reference to A, who I thought planted it there with a fresh bottle of wine perhaps? But the wine bottle wasn't shown. Maybe a gift from A, as a reminder of the squashed fly incident? A definite "A" reference.
Sandra
Hmm, would they have had this on the train though?