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Mr. Blonde
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Welcome to the April 2016 One Week Challenge:

Have you ever wanted to be able to fly? Be invisible, invincible or see through walls? Maybe a little mind control is more your style. Well, then, this is your lucky day.

This week, you're going to tell your own superhero story. This isn't some redux of a previously existing character (although I won't rule out cameos by rich billionaires in bat suits... You are creating a completely new character and letting them roam free and destroy the villains.

T-minus 170 hours until your OWC script is due.

Topic: Superheroes
Genre: Comedy
Budget: Open

You have seven days to write a screenplay of up to 6 pages. The screenplay must be properly formatted and in PDF format. The scripts are due on Friday, April 22nd at 11:59PM EST and must be submitted to: SimplyScripts.com/owc.

There will be a Writer's Choice wherein the participants (and only the participants) will be asked to select the three scripts he or she likes the best.

Timeline:

April 15th at 10:00PM EST - Theme and Genre announced.

April 22nd at 11:59PM EST - Scripts are due.

April 29th at 5:00PM EST - Names and writer's choice revealed.

Jargon:

Up to 6 pages (nobody's going to come after you if it's less, but try to keep it to 6, max).

Properly formatted & saved as a PDF file.

This isn't a contest. There are no prizes.

Free to submit.

One entry per person.

Pissers are welcome. I can't say that everyone will appreciate that type of comedy, but they are more than welcome to be entered.

You can revise your script as many times as you wish up until 11:59PM EST on April 22nd (although, for Don's sake, try not to submit until you're absolutely sure you're submitting something you're proud to submit).

Participants are strongly encouraged to read and comment/review on the scripts submitted.

Do not put your real name on your script. However, please use your real name when submitting your script. (After the challenge closes you can either have your script removed or resubmit with your script with your name on it.

Please put © on the bottom left corner of your title page.

Best of luck and I hope you guys have a lot of fun with this contest.



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Quoted from Mr. Blonde
Have you ever wanted to be able to fly? Be invisible, invincible or see through walls? Maybe a little mind control is more your style. Well, then, this is your lucky day.

This week, you're going to tell your own superhero story. This isn't some redux of a previously existing character (although I won't rule out cameos by rich billionaires in bat suits... You are creating a completely new character and letting them roam free and destroy the villains.

T-minus 170 hours until your OWC script is due.

Topic: Superheroes
Genre: Comedy
Budget: Open

You have seven days to write a screenplay of up to 6 pages. The screenplay must be properly formatted and in PDF format. The scripts are due on Friday, April 22nd at 11:59PM EST and must be submitted to: SimplyScripts.com/owc


Back to the drawing board...  Hey, it was superhero, it was comedy and it was six pages.
Maybe as a bonus unofficial entry,, I'll write Issue #2...


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Does up to 6 pages mean 1-5 pages or 1-6 pages?


I would love feedback on any of these!
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Title page usually counts as page 1. So, I'd say six all up.


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But if you're going by the way the pages are numbered, it doesn't start until after the title page, right? Hmmmm...

By the way, like the sound of this one. Already thinking of things I could do. 6 pagers are a good thing too. Easier to read the lot.


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I see superheroes - good!

I see villains - and the question is, do I have to? As I understand correct villains should be in the story right?
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A six page script is a six page story. Cover page does not count.


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A little taken aback to see comedy as the genre... but, I'll see what comes up. Can't start today as I'm absolutely shattered.

Oh, congrats on being a grandma, Pia.


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What Angry Bear said sounds right. If anyone counts my title page in the page count I will be forced to get my lawyers on their case. I may have to go round there though, my lawyers I mean, as they too are not returning my calls. Probably a faulty line. I blame the parents myself.

Now, AB is a granny? When did that happen? Oh, congrats rather. Rude of me to go off on one before that. Or perhaps at all. Moving on...

I may have a doodle at this. The OWC I mean. Keep up. I know it's not easy. How do you think I feel? I have to write this stuff. Well, I don't. But I do.

Bugger. Where? No, I mean I forgot to go the shops. I'm washing my hair with Fairy Liquid and using old copies of a certain newspaper as erm. Oooh. Suffice to say I'm not reading them. Not that I ever did. What's for dinner. Oooh. A Pot Noodle. The evening meal of Kings and Champions. And me. Life at the edge. This writing business is so feckin' easy, ain't it?

I heard Trump's struggling. I'd struggle past the bathroom mirror if I woke up with that thing on my head. His hair I mean. And why does Ted Cruz's face look like it's made of plastic and he has been sat too close to a fire? These things worry me. I would talk about Sanders and Corbyn, but I fear many might run. Towards me I mean.

I don't like crowds. That's not quite true. Finally I've run out of steam. Aren't you glad. I know I am. Later.

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Nice choice. Reminds me of a Movie poet competition a while back.

I already have a character in mind, just need to add the minor thing of a story

Can we enter more than one script?


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Bugger... feel out of my depth this time... still a least it's a short page count... now, where did I leave that muse?



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Quoted from DarrenJamesSeeley
Back to the drawing board...  Hey, it was superhero, it was comedy and it was six pages.
Maybe as a bonus unofficial entry,, I'll write Issue #2...


That's a damn shame, Darren. I'll tell you what. If people can read issue 2 as a standalone story and make sense of it, I'll allow it.


Quoted from Hunter
Does up to 6 pages mean 1-5 pages or 1-6 pages?


Up to and including 6.


Quoted from LC
Title page usually counts as page 1. So, I'd say six all up.


6 pages of content, plus a title page, if you're so inclined. Some people don't.


Quoted from khamanna
I see superheroes - good!

I see villains - and the question is, do I have to? As I understand correct villains should be in the story right?


Khamanna, if I understand what you're asking, are you asking to write a story from the supervillains' perspective? Maybe I misread. However, the answer to that question would be yes. You can write a story from the perspective of the bad guy.


Quoted from Angry Bear
A six page script is a six page story. Cover page does not count.


Correct.


Quoted from Reef Dreamer
Nice choice. Reminds me of a Movie poet competition a while back.

Can we enter more than one script?


Good eye, Bill. Yes, there was a time towards the end of Moviepoet where somebody made this suggestion, but it has been so long that I forgot who it was, but absolutely. The inspiration for this came from them. Props. For your second question, I'm leaning towards no at the moment, just because that type of thing would fall on Don, so I'd leave that question in his domain.


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I'm pretty sure I'll be able to pick Mark's out in this competition!


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Sean, what I'm asking is - you mentioned mind reading abilities as a kind of super power. But do we really need to have bad guys in the script? I have a script where a kid can read mind and telecommunicate (or whatever you may call it). But there's no villain in that one.
So, can we have a script without a villain?
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I have come up with an idea! I felt obligated to participate because it's comedy, but got worried with the superhero topic. But I have come up with something! And you could say it's...super. Oh aren't I so funny?


I would love feedback on any of these!
Back to Class: http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-series/m-1453330945/ (comedy series, RECENTLY UPDATED DEC. '16)
Cause & Effect: http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-series/m-1472594865/ (comedy-drama series)
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I gotta say, I have a mixed bag of emotions.

1.  I LOVE superheroes.  My immediate idea was my own creation.

2.  Superheroes and comedy don't really mix.  I don't mean like DC drama, but, even Marvel's stuff has some funny situations, but, it still pretty serious (I didn't see Ant Man yet).

3.  6 pages?  How in the world do you create a superhero, his back story, and have a villain, and put him in funny stories?  All in 6  $%^@&*$ pages????????

So, I think you're gonna see a lot of set up jokes.  Or putting them in odd situations that don't make sense.  

Also, disclaimer, I won't use the South Park kids as inspiration for anything.  But, gotta say, Captain Hindsight and MintBerry Crunch are looking pretty damn good right now.

Also a bit disappointed at the limit one per person.  I mean, it's only 6 pages.  I'll read them all anyways.  I just beg and hope mine won't be the worst of the litter....

Unless there's a "prize" (like the ultra coveted order of the crappy mug) for worst, then I'm all over that...

Thoughts??

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6 pages will be a challenge alright. I have an idea I like, but fitting it into 6 pages will be tough.

But that's what these things are all about right, a challenge?


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I love the idea of this OWC. I've got my thinking hat on, and my thinking nipple tassels and thinking thong. I'll see if I can come up with any ideas! If not, I'll just enjoy wearing the thinking outfit and rubbing tuna brine all over my armpits.


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Quoted from khamanna
Sean, what I'm asking is - you mentioned mind reading abilities as a kind of super power. But do we really need to have bad guys in the script? I have a script where a kid can read mind and telecommunicate (or whatever you may call it). But there's no villain in that one.
So, can we have a script without a villain?


No, there don't have to be any bad guys. I was just running through typical superhero tropes.


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3.  6 pages?  How in the world do you create a superhero, his back story, and have a villain, and put him in funny stories?  All in 6  $%^@&*$ pages????????

So, I think you're gonna see a lot of set up jokes.  Or putting them in odd situations that don't make sense.


No one said you had to do the origin story. It's easy enough to already have them existing in this world. Also, have some faith. There are a lot of creative people around here. You'll find all kinds of situations with all kinds of comedy (remember: dark, satire, slapstick, gross-out, they're all kinds of comedy).


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But that's what these things are all about right, a challenge?


It is part of the name after all. =)


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Quoted from MarkRenshaw
I love the idea of this OWC. I've got my thinking hat on, and my thinking nipple tassels and thinking thong. I'll see if I can come up with any ideas! If not, I'll just enjoy wearing the thinking outfit and rubbing tuna brine all over my armpits.


Ummm, Mark,
    I think you got the wrong genre bud.  It's not a porn.  It's a superhero.  Now, I know there have been some superhero porns like Spiderbabe or Lord of the G strings, or BatmanXXX, or the infamous Justice league of porn starts.

Yes, they all exist...  No I haven't seen them, save for Spiderbabe that was on HBO one night, and was quite, ummm educational, I guess....


On a side note, what do you think of the comedy restriction and the 6 page limit?  I think those don't really go with creating a brand new superhero.  

And I really wonder how one could do a superhero that can see through people's clothes (and not be the villain?) or others like mind control etc...

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I have something... not exactly sure where to take it, but it's there. Feels good too, I haven't written a thing since that last short a few weeks ago.


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Got it, Sean, thanks.

I think I got something too! No wait, I don't - I'm not going to jinx it and scare it away. Ideas are like butterflies, you know...
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I knew it! A game of solitaire told me not to write this one.
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Can we define superhero so that there isn't debate on whether or not a certain script qualifies, which is especially possible considering this is comedy.

I would consider a superhero, in the case of a comedy script, to be someone who has, or perceives themself to have, a power or powers that not everyone has that they use in an attempt to do good.


I would love feedback on any of these!
Back to Class: http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-series/m-1453330945/ (comedy series, RECENTLY UPDATED DEC. '16)
Cause & Effect: http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-series/m-1472594865/ (comedy-drama series)
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I'm glad someone brought this up now as opposed to later and I'll give you the clearest answer I can. If it becomes a point of contention for people, I'll either expand upon or reduce it later. Batman, for example, despite the fact that he wasn't thrown into a vat of Acme chemicals, is still a superhero. He has skills/resources that make him that much more powerful than, for example, Rainn Wilson in "Super".

So, the second part of your post would fall into the "Super" category, which I wouldn't consider a superhero.

While this may seem contradictory, I'll tell you that I hate the idea of excluding people who want to participate. If you're interested in going that route, I have no problem with it. I just want you to be aware of the rules being bent quite far. Still, write on. =)


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It's not a porn.  It's a superhero.    

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I haven't seen that one, but, I saw it on the IMDB database.  There are a ton of superhero porn flicks.  Who knew?


And I gotta say, whoever saw Super was one sick dude...  I haven't seen it, but, there was quite a bit of discussion on that.  It is certainly edgy.  And dark.  And for me to say it's dark means it's dark.  Like the pot and the kettle would both call it dark, dark.  

Heck, my borderline torture porn short thinks that's dark...

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Quoted from Dustin
I have something... not exactly sure where to take it, but it's there. Feels good too, I haven't written a thing since that last short a few weeks ago.


Knowing you the way that I do, my first thought is through the gore content and into some bedroom, or sex-filled romp...

Even if you were doing a kids' show cartoon, I'd still imagine you'd take it there.  "Daddy, why does Elsa have bigger knockers then the other girls?"

And  "Daddy, how do you know that Kristoff is happy to see Anna because of the bulge in his pants?"

And "Daddy, why does Hans wear women's clothing under his clothes and carry around "female" toys?"  

Ah, the innocence of youth...

Dan  (i'm scared for his daughter's innocence )


Please read my scripts:
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Quoted from DanC


Knowing you the way that I do, my first thought is through the gore content and into some bedroom, or sex-filled romp...

Even if you were doing a kids' show cartoon, I'd still imagine you'd take it there.  "Daddy, why does Elsa have bigger knockers then the other girls?"

And  "Daddy, how do you know that Kristoff is happy to see Anna because of the bulge in his pants?"

And "Daddy, why does Hans wear women's clothing under his clothes and carry around "female" toys?"  

Ah, the innocence of youth...

Dan  (i'm scared for his daughter's innocence )


Mate, you clearly don't know me well enough. If I ever wrote that badly, I'd just stop writing. Perhaps you could learn something from that.


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Ummm, Mark,
    I think you got the wrong genre bud.  It's not a porn.  It's a superhero.  Now, I know there have been some superhero porns like Spiderbabe or Lord of the G strings, or BatmanXXX, or the infamous Justice league of porn starts.

Yes, they all exist...  No I haven't seen them, save for Spiderbabe that was on HBO one night, and was quite, ummm educational, I guess....


On a side note, what do you think of the comedy restriction and the 6 page limit?  I think those don't really go with creating a brand new superhero.  

And I really wonder how one could do a superhero that can see through people's clothes (and not be the villain?) or others like mind control etc...

Dan


I think of everything as porn, it's my default setting.

As for comedy and 6 pages to tell a superhero story, I think it's fine. I didn't think I'd be able to tell a story set during the end of the world in 2 pages but I managed 3 such scripts for Impact 50. Being given restrictions and challenges is great for a writer, it teaches us storytelling skills we never knew were possible.

You don't have to do an origin, the hero could already be established. You could tell the tale of a mission that goes disastrously wrong in a humorous way for example.

As for me, for the first OWC ever I have an idea BEFORE the final day and I've started working on it BEFORE the final few hours. Will this make it better than normal, or worse? Time will tell!



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I think of everything as porn, it's my default setting.


Here's how I look at things on occasion with the shite I talk. Me. I no imply anything else. How would the last sentence I typed look like as the epitath on my gravestone.

Now you may be sat there with your health shake, coffee or diet pepsi and think 'Oooh, that sounds a bit morbid.'

Look at the sentence at the top in quotes then picture it on a headstone in a graveyard. Go on, you write scripts, don't you? If not, why are you here?

If I saw that, I'd giggle and move on.

Which is exactly what I'm doing right now. Later.

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Very unhappy with the super hero theme.  And 6 pages max?  ARGH...not happy at all.

We'll see if I can throw a pisser together.  


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Mate, you clearly don't know me well enough. If I ever wrote that badly, I'd just stop writing. Perhaps you could learn something from that.


Clearly I was paraphrasing.  And it was a joke.  And I did read your story as Sodomy, remember?  That was pretty in the range of what I put together in like 30 seconds for this exert.  

And I didn't picture you writing it as I wrote it, I pictured it more as she picks it up, reads it over, then asks the questions at the end...

Harsh mate, pretty harsh...

Still (almost) love you tho...

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I know it was your attempt at a joke. I just didn't find it funny. In fact, I found it offensive. So, I told my own unfunny joke, that I hoped would offend you. Say what you like about me, it doesn't affect me at all. Joking about my (or anyone's) kids should be off limits. Especially in regard to sexual content.

Would you actually say that to somebody's face and not expect to be punched?


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Okay, I'm done.  I thought of the story while driving back from Vegas yesterday, so it really didn't take long to finish.  Not really funny, but neither am I.  Just good to finish a story.  I haven't done that in a while.  

I really thought of budget on this one too.  Just in case someone actually wanted to make this thing!  Good luck to all on this.  Comedy is hard for me to write... and super hero... and six pages.  Fun though.

Looking forward to reading everyone  else's!


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Okay, I'm done.  I thought of the story while driving back from Vegas yesterday, so it really didn't take long to finish.  Not really funny, but neither am I.  Just good to finish a story.  I haven't done that in a while.  

I really thought of budget on this one too.  Just in case someone actually wanted to make this thing!  Good luck to all on this.  Comedy is hard for me to write... and super hero... and six pages.  Fun though.

Looking forward to reading everyone  else's!


Also, the link on page one there is no place to submit the script.  Maybe it's just me, or the fact I haven't been in one of these in a while.  Any help here?


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Okay, I'm done.  I thought of the story while driving back from Vegas yesterday, so it really didn't take long to finish.  Not really funny, but neither am I.  Just good to finish a story.  I haven't done that in a while.  

I really thought of budget on this one too.  Just in case someone actually wanted to make this thing!  Good luck to all on this.  Comedy is hard for me to write... and super hero... and six pages.  Fun though.

Looking forward to reading everyone  else's!


Don't submit yet. Use the next few days to edit your work.


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Quoted from Dustin
Don't submit yet. Use the next few days to edit your work.


Exactly.  Absolutely no reason to throw in your entry this early, unless you're not going to have network access all week.

Read it over...read it over...again and again.  You'll be surprised what you find.



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Yeah, I knew you guys would say this.  Jeff, you say it every time and I appreciate it.  I will take both of your advice and do that.  I had the story already in my head and my wife has read this draft and she's usually pretty good about catching things.  Not sure how much time I'll have the rest of the week, and had the story mostly thought out, is why I wanted to put it out there.

Like you said, I'll read it over a couple more times this week and will probably catch some issues.  The biggest issue is I SUCK AT COMEDY!!!  Can't fix that, no matter how many times I read it over.

Thanks again Jeff and Dustin for the advice, which will be followed.  Good luck to you guys and the others!


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Really, about the only thing I can think of right now has already been done.

Mind you, if I wasn't neck deep in projects, I'm sure the subconscious would engage.  But for now, I'll just leave the OWC rank and file contemplating this:




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Oh, congrats on being a grandma, Pia.


Thanks, Dustin! It's still in the oven so to speak, but I'm very excited. Congratulations to you too!! Five kids! Wow! Same mother? If so, you should write your OWC with her as a superhero!  

I wish everyone good luck on the OWC! Can't take part myself, but with the page limit being only six, I will try to read as many as I can. Sometimes these shorties are nice little breakes during the day.

Good Luck all.  



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Yep, same mother. All five are here, the oldest four getting ready for school right now. She is definitely a superhero as she seems to have elasticated skin, she'll be back in great shape in no time. Nobody could ever guess by looking at her that she's had five.


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Yep, same mother. All five are here, the oldest four getting ready for school right now. She is definitely a superhero as she seems to have elasticated skin, she'll be back in great shape in no time. Nobody could ever guess by looking at her that she's had five.


That's awesome Dustin.  Seems like you found your soulmate.  Good job.  Some people won't ever achieve that.

Good luck with the contest.

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That's awesome Dustin.  Seems like you found your soulmate.  Good job.  Some people won't ever achieve that.

Good luck with the contest.

Dan


Thanks mate, I'm definitely one of the lucky ones.


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Dustin,

Congrats on the new arrival! Sounds like you'll have your hands full for awhile. All so worth it, though.

Congrats to Pia as well for GIT -- Grandma In Training!

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Massive flooding here in Houston today so I can't get into the office, so nothing better to do than write a pisser, I guess.

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first draft done.

Man, some folk around here will hate this with a passion. hey ho, a few more days to fine tune.

nice to try a comedy though.


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I'm going to try just reading at night... as that is the only time I can write my own. If I look at this in the light of day, I'll delete the lot.


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Despite it being daylight, it still feels like night to me and I have finished my story. It has an actual ending and I think I'm happy with it.

It would be nice too, that as we're all attempting comedy here, that we all try to see the funny in each other's work. Even if we don't. Just out of respect for our efforts. Especially the writers that are actually taking part. The ones that aren't aren't exactly obligated but should remember that we have achieved what they couldn't. Chickens.


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The thing about comedy, besides its subjectiveness, is that it is very difficult to have it come across on the page. Most times, it's all in the delivery.


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I've managed two pages so far. At this rate I'll have it finished next Wendesday. I'm having a new kitchen and dining room fitted so my house is chaos and impossible to write in. I'll get it done though!

I do agree with Dustin's suggestion.  Henceforth when I'm reading these scripts I won't say if I didn't find the script funny, as humour is indeed a personal thing and sometimes does not come across well on the page. However, if something does tickle my funnybone in a good way I'll be sure to mention it.



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Managed to crank out a few pages inside a busy evening after writing in my head all day. Will finish tonight. First OWC entry for me since 2013. Don't have much by way of expectations, but the development process has been much different than usual (in a good way), not to mention fun. I'll take it.


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Ive still got nothing ;-(


That's what I initially told myself about my idea... and I'm staying in denial.


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I'm trying write a short for this challenge as well. A few questions though...
Why shouldn't we put our name on it? Should we use a fake name instead?
And most important of all: What is a "pisser"?


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You tore up her picture.

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Dear Bill,

Good snort there. I mean the drink. At least I think so. Sorry, Vlade-B, interesting name. Do you bust rhymes with a name like that? Seriously, I'm not taking the piss. I often do, but not tonight. If you're not rhyming with that name, I would humbly suggest trying it. You never know. Pardon an old man trying to talk to a younger person. People say I'm trying. Very.

You don't put your name on the script because that makes you anonymous, sort of. People may recognise your style of writing, if they read your stuff a lot. Even then, they can't be certain who wrote what. This tends to lead to reviewers being more honest and less biased about the actual scripts, without the baggage of knowing who wrote it, most of the time.

I could go on. But I'd say that's enough for now.

A 'piisser' is an old American term, mainly used by old people to describe what people in my part of the world would describe as a piss take, or a joke script. One not to be taken seriously. It should be full of gags, hopefully good ones.

I'd never heard the term before I started wandering these boards. Don't worry, young people don't use it. They are far too cool to do so.

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finally caught one of these in time.  I'll try to fire one off... not much time, and i have no ideas whatsoever... but I can come up with something


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I've seen good pissers couple of times actually.

It's weird as I'm totally not a fan, because most of the time it's a waste of reader's time. But Sean said what he said... I know why though.
I understand.
Too many comedy scripts and this site is not used to comedy much - we'll think each one is a pisser. So, I guess, it's a special ninja strategy on Sean's part.
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Good luck everybody in the OWC. I'll try to read as many as possible.


Aren't you participating as well? Come on!
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And where are Libby and Dena? I don't see them on the thread.

Wonka said she's not going to be in and Pia is not gonna write one. Well, I've heard tat lotsa times from Pia so you never know. But Janet is out - looks like it.
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Quoted from Vlade-B
I'm trying write a short for this challenge as well. A few questions though...
Why shouldn't we put our name on it? Should we use a fake name instead?
And most important of all: What is a "pisser"?


You shouldn't put your name on it so that you can receive objective feedback. Some people may be tempted, when seeing somebody's name on a script, to review it specifically because they know them or avoid it because they don't. Leaving your name off is for the best, for everyone. No, on the script, don't put your name or a fake name. However, if and when you submit the script, please put in your real information.

As for the second part, it's a long-standing joke on this site. What "pisser" refers to is almost a parody of a poorly written script. The script is written by someone trying to emulate bad scripts by writing one intentionally bad.

Third of all, welcome to the One Week Challenge. =)


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Dena told me she's out, as she hates the superhero theme.

I hate it too, and will most likely be out.  Also, only 6 pages doesn't give much room to create a superhero, IMO.

Pisser?  Ah...maybe...maybe, but I highly doubt it would adhere to the superhero theme.

Maybe a new Bunnyman script?  


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No, on the script, don't put your name or a fake name.




Any particular reason why no fake names either? I know Don typically comes up with his own, but creating pseudonyms is and has been fun in and of itself.



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Pia is not gonna write one. Well, I've heard tat lotsa times from Pia so you never know.

You calling me a liar???  


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I didn't like the genre... but a challenge is a challenge. You either chicken out or give it your best shot. I was tempted to chicken out, not like I haven't got a hundred and one excuses just like everyone else, but you should never go down without a fight. You might end up getting a good kicking, but at least you never ran... hm, now that I think about that logic, perhaps there are some occasions where it's best to run.


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Dustin, don't think - this never brings much good. That's what I tell myself - just write and submit, write and submit. No thinking.

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Didn't Dena write the Bunnyman? She's out, so no Bunnymen this time.
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Started mine today. Hopefully finish a draft tonight. I know it'll be utter drivel but I've still got a good 3 days to go over and clean it up.

Good luck to everyone. It's not an easy one.


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Aren't you participating as well? Come on!


Comedy and Superheroes - couldn't be further away from my writing. I'll wait for the next one


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The thing about comedy, besides its subjectiveness, is that it is very difficult to have it come across on the page. Most times, it's all in the delivery.


Yeah good point Blondie. The timing of the jokes or final punchline needs to be spot on.

Using (beat) in a comedy can be vital at the right time, especially in a 6 page script. Also don't angonise over a line to make it funny. Go with the spontaneity


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What stops me is having to read and comment on 25 or 30 superhero scripts that are supposed to to be funny.



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What stops me is having to read and comment on 25 or 30 superhero scripts that are supposed to to be funny.


Damn good point!!!  ARGH!!!



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What stops me is having to read and comment on 25 or 30 superhero scripts that are supposed to to be funny.

No one has to read ALL the entries. I don't even know where that comes from. Some people do because they feel they should, but it's certainly not a requirement. It is however, frowned upon to not read at all if you have entered.

I will try to read as many as I can, even though I can't enter this time.  


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No one has to read ALL the entries. I don't even know where that comes from. Some people do because they feel they should, but it's certainly not a requirement. It is however, frowned upon to not read at all if you have entered.

I will try to read as many as I can, even though I can't enter this time.  


It should be a requirement to read at least half, if not more...well, at least a page or so before you're out.  

I predict you'll be in, Pia, but I guess we'll have to wait to find out.

I wrote a half page pisser, so I'm in!!  


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A very civil discussion thread so far.


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Blondie, we need to something about perps who enter and read none of the others.  Don used an asterisk system once to show who had been reading.  I say bring it back!  Lol


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Blondie, we need to something about perps who enter and read none of the others.  Don used an asterisk system once to show who had been reading.  I say bring it back!  Lol


I say tar and feather them!!!!



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Oh, maybe I missed it but what's the deal with no pseudonyms? I always enjoy coming up with those. Easiest part of the OWC.


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Any particular reason why no fake names either? I know Don typically comes up with his own, but creating pseudonyms is and has been fun in and of itself.


Fair point, James. I just didn't want to confuse him. But, you know what I mean. Fakes are no issue.


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Quoted from stevie
Blondie, we need to something about perps who enter and read none of the others.  Don used an asterisk system once to show who had been reading.  I say bring it back!  Lol


Unless we were to do the same thing that I did with the Urban Legends (and was a dismal failure), only Don would have access to who writes what script, hence he's the only one who would have control over something like that.


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Yeah I hear ya Blondie.  Hopefully we don't get any non readers entering


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Stevie, you should write about the Villains. Their whole season lasted six pages and it was funny.


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Stevie, you should write about the Villains. Their whole season lasted six pages and it was funny.


Lol no superhero could have saved us.   Pisser of a season


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I thought everyone who entered the last time read?  I guess I was wrong.

As all of you know about me, I will read every story.  It might take a while, but, I'm good for a read.

I plan to enter, have a concept.  Not sure I can execute it, but, I have a concept.

Does it have to be comedy?  I mean, horror is funny, right

Right???

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Oh, wait. Villains are superheroes as well, right? Wow, what a thought - that opens up a whole bag of opportunities.

Don't you see fun in writing that? I'm surprised at you, people.

(and I'm very happy to hear that Pia is in!!)
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Iím surprised at people dropping out because they think Superheroes are not their thing. If something is not your thing, twist it until it is. Give it a fresh spin! If anyoneís seen the TV show Misfits, thatís as far removed from a traditional Ďsuperheroí story  as you can get and yet it is a story about a bunch of societies worst louts gaining superpowers and learning to become heroesÖplus itís absolutely hilarious.  

If the challenge was a 6 page comedy about a first date that goes disastrously wrong and you think, ĎHey, I could write that!í Well write that, but give one of the characters (or both) superpowers and have that as the reason the date goes disastrously wrong.

It's all about how you approach it.

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Ditto that, Mark!

And the comedy doesn't have to over the top hillarious. Couple of funny phrases here and there and voila.
It's not always a parody. Just something light and funny at places. But if you want to go for something like a parody - even better. It's just you don't have to.

Sean said reading someone's mind is super enough. How hard it can be? My mother reads my mind all the time. And I don't know it. The thought is hillarious to me - oh the things she would learn.

And I'll be waiting to see a lot of "superheroes is not your thing, sorry" in response to mine. And that's fine. It's a game right.
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I thought everyone who entered the last time read?  I guess I was wrong.

I think that's correct. I believe that was because only board members were allowed to enter. The non reading entrants were more of a problem when anyone was allowed to enter and the OWC was promoted on social media.


As far as villains go, Sean is in charge of this OWC, but IMO, the assignment was superhero, not super villain...


Khamanna, if I enter or not depends on if I finish The Hit rewrite or not.  


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Quoted from Angry Bear
As far as villains go, Sean is in charge of this OWC, but IMO, the assignment was superhero, not super villain...


Not quite, Pia. I did reference that telling the story from the supervillains' perspective is allowed. As long as the protagonist has superpowers, you're on the right track. Good guy, bad guy, doesn't matter. =)


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Oh, what the heck - I'm in. Just tinkered something together. It really sucks, but I guess you guys got me with the whole challenge thing and such...


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Not all superheroes have superpowers. Also, a superhero is not a super villain. A superhero is somebody that seeks out injustice and tries to do something about it, as opposed to ordinary heroes that do heroic things because they happen to be there at the time. Robin Hood would be an early example of a superhero.


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Oh, what the heck - I'm in. Just tinkered something together. It really sucks, but I guess you guys got me with the whole challenge thing and such...


Big thumbs up!!

Especially since there's no one to threat this time - all board members, a loving bunch of pussycats!
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Also, a superhero is not a super villain.

Might be, but Sean is open to our interpretations. So if I see a villain as a protagonist - the main thing for me he has some kind of powers.

Robin Hood for the superhero also counts in my book.
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Specifying what a superhero is doesn't sound like being open to interpretation to me. Also, changing things to include writing about a super villain opens up a new aspect not available to writers that began working on a superhero story. A super villain is the complete opposite to a super hero.

We should have been challenged to write a comedy about somebody endowed with superpowers. That would fit in perfectly with what is being said now. The initial instruction was to write a comedy about a superhero.


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Quoted from Dustin
Specifying what a superhero is doesn't sound like being open to interpretation to me. Also, changing things to include writing about a super villain opens up a new aspect not available to writers that began working on a superhero story. A super villain is the complete opposite to a super hero.

We should have been challenged to write a comedy about somebody endowed with superpowers. That would fit in perfectly with what is being said now. The initial instruction was to write a comedy about a superhero.


Dustin, I first mentioned that supervillains were allowed on the first page of this thread. This is not some thing that I thought of today, for the fun of it.


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Khamanna, if I enter or not depends on if I finish The Hit rewrite or not.  


Sounds fair enough to me.

I hate to ask, but do you have Roth, Hurt and Malick on board? I only ask as the two latter ones are getting on and may need to snooze occasionally. I would, but I'm not in Spain anymore. I miss the food. Spanish, I mean. The food. Stop it. No.

I'm only joshing. And showing off like a cock. Sorry, dick. Hmm, that didn't sound much better, Oh well.

I sincerely hope the rewrite turns out well. I know how hard they can be. I think you'll waltz through it.

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Quoted from rendevous


Sounds fair enough to me.

I hate to ask, but do you have Roth, Hurt and Malick on board? I only ask as the two latter ones are getting on and may need to snooze occasionally. I would, but I'm not in Spain anymore. I miss the food. Spanish, I mean. The food. Stop it. No.

I'm only joshing. And showing off like a cock. Sorry, dick. Hmm, that didn't sound much better, Oh well.

I sincerely hope the rewrite turns out well. I know how hard they can be. I think you'll waltz through it.

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The super-villain thing is not in the initial post in this thread, which is where I took my information from. Not that I want to write Despicable Me 3 anyway.

You have avoided tackling my other point regarding superpowers. Reading through this thread you acknowledge that superpowers are not necessary to be a superhero, then go on to say that our superheroes must have superpowers to qualify.

Just a suggestion, but perhaps it would be better if you left the whole thing open to interpretation. This would also help prevent people bailing early because certain perceived parameters aren't met.


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Quoted from Dustin
Just a suggestion, but perhaps it would be better if you left the whole thing open to interpretation. This would also help prevent people bailing early because certain perceived parameters aren't met.


This is an interesting point, and also something I've believed going back many OWCs. Funny thing is, I think they've always been open to interpretation. The parameters tend not to be an issue until members start asking questions... which they don't like the answers to. Only those answers didn't exist until the questions were asked. It's basically a self-fulfilling prophecy.

So I say fuck it. Do what you want if the guidelines don't explicitly say you can't. There's nothing at stake, and no one ever gets disqualified anyway. Most of the issues I've seen in the past of parameters being too rigid were created by members themselves asking for clarification instead of just going with their first instinct.


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Quoted from Dustin
The super-villain thing is not in the initial post in this thread, which is where I took my information from. Not that I want to write Despicable Me 3 anyway.

You have avoided tackling my other point regarding superpowers. Reading through this thread you acknowledge that superpowers are not necessary to be a superhero, then go on to say that our superheroes must have superpowers to qualify.

Just a suggestion, but perhaps it would be better if you left the whole thing open to interpretation. This would also help prevent people bailing early because certain perceived parameters aren't met.


Of course it wasn't in the first post. I waited for people to have questions (as always happens) and explained them to the best of my ability.

No, not really. I used the Batman example as a way to try and alleviate the problems some people have with some superheroes not exactly being "super". With that said, when people ask questions, the idea is to see how far the boundaries can be stretched. Would you feel better if I used the term "super abilities", or would that have made it worse? I'm trying to get the idea across that a person doesn't have to have been bitten by a radioactive spider in order to qualify for this challenge. I have no problem with that. Stretch them as far as you feel comfortable doing.

I would have left it to interpretation, but that left people with more questions and ones that were less about pushing the boundaries and more about actually clarifying things. I try and simplify them as best I could.


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So I say fuck it. Do what you want if the guidelines don't explicitly say you can't. There's nothing at stake, and no one ever gets disqualified anyway. Most of the issues I've seen in the past of parameters being too rigid were created by members themselves asking for clarification instead of just going with their first instinct.


I don't believe in DQ'ing people or having them DQ'ed. If anything, I like to let it all get sorted out by the comments. If people don't mention that your script is way off the mark, in regards to the parameters, you're in good shape. But, as usual, this is just for fun and to test your abilities (and, possibly, win the crappy mug) and that's all.


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If it's open to interpretation then questions do not matter. It is up to the person asking the question to find their own answers.

Shame it's taken up most of the time we get to write the thing to figure out exactly what the requirements are... but then, what should I expect when you think it's OK to wait for questions rather than specifying exactly what you want from the beginning.


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Quoted from Dustin
Shame it's taken up most of the time we get to write the thing to figure out exactly what the requirements are... but then, what should I expect when you think it's OK to wait for questions rather than specifying exactly what you want from the beginning.


Here's my take on this: if a person couldn't come up with a script that fit into the parameters that were laid out in the beginning with what I posted in the original post, then they were trying to find ways to push the envelope. Like I said, I have no problem with that because no one will be disqualified for it.

As for asking questions, I'm going to point to an OWC that occurred before you arrived at the site. No matter how narrow the parameters are made, there will always be questions by people looking to see how far away from the original topic they can get:

http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-10OWC/m-1286589906/s-0/


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Thanks Rendevous and Mr. Blonde, for both the explanation and the welcome.

@Rendevous, yes I did bust rhymes when I was a teenager. I don't recall that phase too fondly, though.

I don't know if I really qualify as young (late 20's), especially after asking the next question. How do I send my script? In the submiting form there is no button which lets me upload a file.


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Quoted from Vlade-B
In the submiting form there is no button which lets me upload a file.


Maybe it's a sign that you should edit it again.


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Quoted from Vlade-B
Thanks Rendevous and Mr. Blonde, for both the explanation and the welcome.

@Rendevous, yes I did bust rhymes when I was a teenager. I don't recall that phase too fondly, though.

I don't know if I really qualify as young (late 20's), especially after asking the next question. How do I send my script? In the submiting form there is no button which lets me upload a file.


The upload button appears after you submitted the form. Got me puzzled as well.


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In the submiting form there is no button which lets me upload a file.


First you fill in the form - your name, script's title, your nickname on the boards, your logline.
Now you click on the button that says I understood the paragraph.

As soon as you click it another form comes up that says "submit your file". That's when you submit.
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Making a superhero comedy is tough. i expect a few entries along the lines of Underdog or Hong Kong Phooey -not those characters er se, but rather "animated" anthropomorphic heroes. AS for L/A, it's tougher because all the good jokes about the sub-genre have beenused from My Super Ex-Girlfriend to the recent Deadpool.

What is funny? I don't know, really.
Does 'coffin humor' count? Like in action films, a hero or villain cracks a zinger ("Blow off some steam Bennet" - Commando "Thatís a Smith & WessonÖand youíve had your six" James Bond, Dr. No)

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Thanks Rendevous and Mr. Blonde, for both the explanation and the welcome.

@Rendevous, yes I did bust rhymes when I was a teenager. I don't recall that phase too fondly, though.


I understand, I think. I hope the rhymes bit was happy enough though.

And not like that posh woman who liked horses whose father was a politician. She was ultra confident she could crack rhymes with the boyz at an open mike night on their turf. With a TV crew from Channel 4 in the UK in tow.

I watched it months later on the Tube of You via the Googlers. It's hilarious. She fails so badly and the lads laugh so much I had to watch it again. And later again. Oh dear. Confidence can sometimes make you trip. It does with me at least. Now and again.

Rhyming will stand you in good stead around here.

I'd take Dustin's advice regarding editing. Can't do any harm. Every script can improve. Even mine. As for signs, it's great if you can understand them all. I wish I did.

Good work keep up etc.

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Finished the script draft. Night shift tonight so hopefully some time to edit and re tweak it. It certainly was a 'challenge' for me, this one.

Pretty sure I'm well within the parameters, I was very liberal in my interpretation on the last OWC.

Good luck all.


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Okay - I'm in. Look forward to the reads. Had this tune in my head the whole time.

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I wonder where I'd go if I could fly around downtown
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I'm in too, just editing to make sure it reads as actively as possible. I'll submit tomorrow.


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I'm in too, just editing to make sure it reads as actively as possible. I'll submit tomorrow.


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Indeed. I can agree with very good, EO.

But I do hope folks aren't actively getting carried away.

As I was saying to Dave, y'know the painter. He does loads. Unfortunately he has the legend '& Decorator' after Painter on his van. Kinda takes the edge off his erm... edginess.

But he was telling me about DaVinci. Not DiCaprio. We hear quite enough about him. The sexy rich and talented barstard. I still watch The Departed in awe. Enough.

Dave said painters don''t finish paintings. They walk away before they spoil them. Hmm, I thought.

Usually the closest Dave comes to deep thought is analysing how the game went on Saturday.

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Very good.


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Dave, we agreed that you're supposed to say that after you've read it.


Damn, I forgot. My bad. Hopefully my vote won't be DQ'd. I feel so bad that I am only going to stick to one entry for myself. My alternate one was about a person that had the power to make people feel happy and dance by singing inane songs. He was:

Super Califragilisticexpialidocious Man

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Mine was going to be about Fatman and Ribbon and the not so sexy Rat Woman. It was going to be a spoof on the old Batman and Robin TV show. Ah well...  


That would have been a good one. I can already see the "BAM! WHAM! thank-you Mam!" on the screen.


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My wife just came with a cracker, but it's too late for me to anything about, plus it wasn't going to be easy.

I'll enter the one I have knocked up, and roll with the punches  


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I've entered mine. Still rereading - there's that one sentence and I don't know whether to use that thought on page 2 or page 4. It's an important thought but I don't know how soon I should the reader know.

Vot to do... vot to do..,
Good luck to those entered.

(oh and since I haven't recieved a letter telling that I entered chance are I will go crazy tomorro and start entering every hour or so)
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My wife just came with a cracker...


Interesting... thanks for letting us know.


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My crackers usually come with a very poor joke and some mini screwdrivers or an oversize paper clip, if I'm really lucky a shoe horn!



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I'm currently participating in a 48 hour challenge (missed this until yesterday)!! Is there a way to get an email flagging when these challenges start?


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Quoted from Cam Gray
I'm currently participating in a 48 hour challenge (missed this until yesterday)!! Is there a way to get an email flagging when these challenges start?


Probably not since SS doesn't have a mailing list. (I don't think). The OWC usually occur in Jan, Apr, Jul and Oct though, so keep an eye out.  


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Guess I better get the old calendar out, or maybe just pay more attention. Thanks for clearing that up!


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I'll be submitting my attempt either later on tonight or tomorrow....never wrote a comedy before so I'm interested to see how well it does...if at all.

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Interesting... thanks for letting us know.


Whoops - good spot. Came UP with a cracker idea - takes more than a cracker these days !!

I fear I'm I for a good beating this time, crackers excluded  


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Maybe it's a sign that you should edit it again.


Not sure how much I believe in signs, but I just finished the editing as suggested. Thanks


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Pia/Cammy

There seems to have been a newsletter in the past as there's an archive for it and you can still enter your email address to subscribe to it...

Maybe Don should consider re-instating it, might be useful for enhancing SS for Producers etc...

Just a thought

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Cheers Anthony, good find. The poor man's probably run off his feet just doing the regular website stuff, but I'd definitely sign up for the newsletter if it came back into circulation...


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As for asking questions, I'm going to point to an OWC that occurred before you arrived at the site. No matter how narrow the parameters are made, there will always be questions by people looking to see how far away from the original topic they can get:

http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-10OWC/m-1286589906/s-0/


That's some funny stuff right there!


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First draft is done and now Iím wishing this was a 10 page OWC. It feels clunky and rushed. That will teach me to be all cocky about how doable this challenge is!

Ah well, I said Iíd enter and I will. Iíll give it a polish later and see if I can sort out some of the issues.


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Submitted. You can edit, edit and edit and always find more to edit. But I've had it.

Look forward to reading the submissions.


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Submitted. You can edit, edit and edit and always find more to edit. But I've had it.

Look forward to reading the submissions.


It's also good to step away from it and then come back again with a fresh head. I haven't looked at mine for a while now. I'll give it one more go over and then submit.

Good luck to all who enter... and I do agree that this one could have done with being slightly longer. My story could do with another character but to include it would take it too high over page count. I may put it in if a rewrite ever takes my fancy... or, of course, the public demand it. Never rule it out.


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I have a first draft completed. I'm a good page over the limit. Time to whittle it down.

Don't know how I feel about this one.  Comedy is weird to write.


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Guys, Don asked me to pass the word along. He's very busy of late and will be uploading scripts on Sunday instead of Saturday.


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Yeah, as others are now saying, and I said immediately, 6 pages is too short...especially for this theme.


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Six pages is just fine for my masterpiece  

In fact, as these are comedies, I like the shorter page length - may make them more tolerable, mine included. But I do get it is harder to construct a story in that length




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Six pages is a challenge, but more than doable. I basically interpreted it as write a scene. Maybe two. A scene should really have its own arc anyway, so it works out.

The limit should also take the edge off reading the other scripts. The last OWC I entered, I read all the entries. I was pretty bitter by the end. It's comedy this time. Could be even worse.


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I just wonder if my script is funny at all. I didn't exactly roll on the floor when I wrote it, so I guess readers won't either. It's a somewhat funny twist in the end, but not like can't stop laughing. Guess that's the problem if a non-comedy writer is forced to write comedy


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I'm down to six pages. Just about.

The girlfriend just had a read. She chuckled. Don't know what that means.  


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I just wonder if my script is funny at all. I didn't exactly roll on the floor when I wrote it, so I guess readers won't either. It's a somewhat funny twist in the end, but not like can't stop laughing. Guess that's the problem if a non-comedy writer is forced to write comedy


I think it is hard to perceive humour in your own work, unless you are a reasonably skilled comedy writer. If comedy is not your natural style, then it will be a challenge... which of course, this is.

I reckon I have a couple of gags in mine that are passable as humourous, but I don't think the whole script is 'cleverly funny'.

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We should take something when we read these. Or drink. Maybe we'll perceive the entries as funny/funnier this way.

Mine is not so funny either. The main thing is - it won't make you cry. That's a comedy enough for me.
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I'm in. Do some last minute editing tonight and submit. Good luck to all.


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We should take something when we read these. Or drink. Maybe we'll perceive the entries as funny/funnier this way.


So there you have it kids, Kham's guide to having a tolerable time during the OWC. Just get high as fuck and laugh all the way through.


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So there you have it kids, Kham's guide to having a tolerable time during the OWC. Just get high as fuck and laugh all the way through.


Or as I like to call it -- Tuesday.


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I'll be drinking tonight. Who knows what might happen to my script..


Don will start uploading only on Sunday. Don't get too ready too soon)
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Don will start uploading only on Sunday. Don't get too ready too soon)


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But we still gotta submit tonight, right?


Not if you get high... speaking of which, time to put down this high G and get around to submitting, myself. Not, submitting myself.


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Bollocks, I've just seen this.  I desperately wanted to enter a OWC as I've not done one in years, and I've only gone and missed it!

Good luck everyone and I'll be sure to give some a read.


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Mine's in... and I await the highly complimentary comments. I've seen the word 'genius' bandied about quite a bit recently. I'm expecting to see it again in my thread... and again... perhaps in every comment, but do try to mix it up a bit. Try a thesaurus.


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Looking forward to reading these! If you can make me laugh then your script is worthy lol,

Now i gotta do some editing as am half a page over the limit.


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Now i gotta do some editing as am half a page over the limit.


Oh just play with the margins - who doesnt
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Oh just play with the margins - who doesnt



lol K! Will dispense with THE END and possibly FADE OUT.  I'm loathe to heavily edit my comic babies but may have too...sigh


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Mine's in... and I await the highly complimentary comments. I've seen the word 'genius' bandied about quite a bit recently. I'm expecting to see it again in my thread... and again... perhaps in every comment, but do try to mix it up a bit. Try a thesaurus.


Perhaps "virtuoso", to add a bit of spice?


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Oh just play with the margins - who doesnt


In all fairness, that may actually pass under the "pisser clause"... Lol.


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I remember quite a few scripts DQ'd at MP for messing with margins or the loose and tight options in FD. The tricky thing however was letting people use the A4 size vs the shorter US letter size.


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I'm playing with my margins as we speak.  


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Aah, the anti-pisstake bro. That'll stand out like dog's aggots lol


There's no point in writing a pisser when pissers are allowed... I'm a revolutionary!!!

Besides it'll give me something to complain about


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Mine's in. I must admit I nearly dropped out. My step-brother hung himself today and it's been chaos as you can imagine. Writing comedy was the last thing I wanted to do but I found I couldn't sleep and writing this has calmed me, which is quite weird but welcoming.

I don't mention this for sympathy or anything, I do so simply because it happened and I need to accept that. It's also a good reminder of how important writing is to me and how medicinal being creative can be.  

Best of luck everyone, let the comedy and creativeness commence.


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So sorry for your loss mate.


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Really sorry to hear that, man. Glad you could find some solace in creativity.


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Okay. I did it. I submitted. Standing by for death by a thousand cuts.
Bring it on.


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There hasn't been an OWC in a while.

Let's see if we can get one started this month!

Who's with me?



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This is probably a really dumb question, but, when it says 6 pages, does that mean that 6 and 1/2 pages (part of a page 7) is too long?  

I've cut so much already for this limit.  I'd hate to cut more...

Dan


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Mine's in. I must admit I nearly dropped out. My step-brother hung himself today and it's been chaos as you can imagine. Writing comedy was the last thing I wanted to do but I found I couldn't sleep and writing this has calmed me, which is quite weird but welcoming.

I don't mention this for sympathy or anything, I do so simply because it happened and I need to accept that. It's also a good reminder of how important writing is to me and how medicinal being creative can be.  

Best of luck everyone, let the comedy and creativeness commence.


Mark, I'm truly sorry for what happened to you today.  

There aren't really words for something like this.  We're thinking of you in this terrible time.

Dan


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I'm very sorry for your loss, Mark.


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I didn't take any chances.  I got it down to 6, but I'm not happy with it.  I don't think this will go over very well, especially hacked the way it was...

If it was only 2 pages longer...

Dan

PS
   I submitted.  I really don't know what to expect.  The other 2 times I entered, I had a good feeling and I got slammed.  This time, I think it could have been funny, but, I just had no time to develop any situations.  Of course, no one did...


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Quoted from DanC
This is probably a really dumb question, but, when it says 6 pages, does that mean that 6 and 1/2 pages (part of a page 7) is too long?  

I've cut so much already for this limit.  I'd hate to cut more...

Dan


It's my understanding that the shorts must at least be six pages. I for one am not going to stomp the ground if I read someone who went to 8 or 9 pages.


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I submitted with 2 minutes to go. My usual idiot scramble to the finish line.
Not even sure I submitted the pdf. version. But big deal if I blew it, compared to what Mark R. is going through.

My condolences, Mark.
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Quoted from DarrenJamesSeeley


It's my understanding that the shorts must at least be six pages. I for one am not going to stomp the ground if I read someone who went to 8 or 9 pages.


From Mr. Blonde:

Up to and including 6 pages (nobody's going to come after you if it's less, but try to keep it to 6, max).

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Quoted from MarkRenshaw
I don't mention this for sympathy or anything, I do so simply because it happened and I need to accept that. It's also a good reminder of how important writing is to me and how medicinal being creative can be.  


Mark,

There's not a lot I, or anyone else, can say that'll help. You've my sincere sympathies. I'm gonna leave it there.

The best of luck to you and yours in the future.

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It's my understanding that the shorts must at least be six pages. I for one am not going to stomp the ground if I read someone who went to 8 or 9 pages.


Can't say I understand why people would be okay if it goes longer. Rules are clearly stated, and I think it  gives a writer an unfair advantage if he/she is allowed to go over the max. As Dan said, he wished he could've had two more pages. Well, if I was allowed two more pages maybe mine could've been better, as well. That's the whole challenge, though. Get it done in the pages allotted. Anyone over that limit gets a pass from me. No reason the folks who actually followed the rules should have to abide by those who didn't.



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From Mr. Blonde:

Up to and including 6 pages (nobody's going to come after you if it's less, but try to keep it to 6, max).



Again, I'm not going to huff and puff about it if I read someone went up to 8 or 10 pages. What am I gonna say, "I'm out by page seven"  


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Page count is something I'll be fairly hot on too. I don't mind half a page, but anything more and it's unfair. I'll read it and comment, but it will get a pass.


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Can't say I understand why people would be okay if it goes longer. Rules are clearly stated, and I think it  gives a writer an unfair advantage if he/she is allowed to go over the max. As Dan said, he wished he could've had two more pages. Well, if I was allowed two more pages maybe mine could've been better, as well. That's the whole challenge, though. Get it done in the pages allotted. Anyone over that limit gets a pass from me. No reason the folks who actually followed the rules should have to abide by those who didn't.



Since when do the participants follow all the rules  
So in other words, let's say you like a script but you find out they went over by half a page?
I'm sure there might be a few.


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When I'm reading, reviewing and filling in the Writer's Choice form I'll definitely be taking page count into consideration.

My biggest challenge was fitting my entry into the six page limit. If it was eight pages it would have been a stronger entry for sure. It's a challenge. The six pages is part of the challenge.

Not saying I won't read, but it'll be a factor when I'm reviewing.


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Quoted from DarrenJamesSeeley


Since when do the participants follow all the rules  
So in other words, let's say you like a script but you find out they went over by half a page?
I'm sure there might be a few.


Half a page I won't squawk about, no. But 2, 3? I do have a problem with that.


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Mine went over by a full page but I whittled it down. Even a half page I feel would have made it better. Just my opinion. But it's down to six. I feel peeps would be looking cross-eyed at it if it went over the limit. Not that they won't be looking cross-eyed at it anyway.  


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My October OWC was 12 pages instead of 10. I messed up because in the past it has usually been a 12 page limit. This resulted in most people refusing to read the script. I don't blame them. I didn't follow the clearly stated rules...


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I wanted to say 2 things:

1.  I think the page limit is important.  I am unhappy because 6 pages is barely enough time to set up a story, and a comedy on top of that is even harder.  Sure, you can do 1 or 2 page scripts, look at that Impact 50 limit of 2 pages.  

But, the quality of the story really gets hurt when you cut so much out.  The original story came in at 13 pages, so, I knew I had to cut a lot.  And I did.  When I got it to 8 pages, I really took a hard look.  7 pages was a killer.  Then I got it to 6 and a half.  I was gonna leave it there, b/c in theory, it didn't go over 6 pages, it wasn't a full 7, but, I thought I'd get dinged and didn't want that to be a problem too.

I barely got it to 6, but, as some others have said, their quality suffered too.  IF people like the cut version, I might do a longer version that I had in my mind.  I really have no idea if anyone will like it or not.  I have a feeling some will find it unfocused.  Trying to cram too much into those precious 6 pages.


So, who entered?  I entered 1 story.  


2.  I have said for weeks that this site is more like a family site for those who contribute a lot.  And the love for Mark during his tragedy only proves my point.  Mark, all of us know there aren't words right now.  But, dude, you aren't alone.  I think I can speak for every regular person on here who already has said something, but, you are in our thoughts and prayers bud.

This site reminds me of one of my fav series, Faceoff.  It's a Syfy show about make-up artists for movies.  A bunch of people vie for the 100K first prize and a new car and a whole makeup kit and lots of exposure for Hollywood to see.

Most reality shows are full of back-stabbers and just horrible people.  I have yet to see that on Faceoff.  It's amazing how kind each of these people are.  They are all fierce, yet, never cross that line.  They all want the prize, but, never ever mislead.  That's respect.

Once in the semi-finals, a person was doing something that someone else saw right away wouldn't work.  He told that person.  And that person saw he was right and changed their approach.  I was shocked b/c both the person who said something and the one who accepted it as truth knew that the bond they create on the show trumps money.

Another time was when this guy who had helped everyone out for the whole year got hurt late in the competition.  He had sliced his hand open and had to go to the ER.  His masks were still in the molds.  He knew he'd never have enough time to finish and his time on the show would end.  Only, that didn't happen.  Oh no.  The others, took time from their own tasks and cleaned out his molds and got them ready for him.  When he got back, he was sad.  But, when he saw that, everyone started crying.  The show of sportsmanship was overwhelming.

I see that a lot on here.  Lets face it, we all want to sell that monster script for a million.  We also all know that they could choose someone else's script on here.  And there are only so many people buying scripts.  

Yet, that doesn't stop anyone on here from helping people get better.  Some criticism can be harsh.  But, that doesn't mean it isn't right.  This site has helped me get better.

One person recently read a script of mine and couldn't believe how much better I've gotten since I joined.  I listed to what everyone on here said.

Yes, you can't please everyone, but, man, the sportsmanship on this site is amazing and like a family.  A family I'm proud to be a part of.

And Mark, your family stands with you!!

Sincerely,
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I'm in this go round, and yes page count worried me too. At one point I looked at my script and said, "Yeah, I can get it under 7 pages... if I take out all the jokes." Not only is creating a superhero in six pages hard, but comedy often requires extra beats that a straight forward delivery wouldn't need. At the end of the day I lucked out and was left with some room to work.

PS Sorry to here what you're going through, Mark. Hopefully, at the very least, the contest can be a good way to get your mind off it for a bit.
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I looked at my script and said, "Yeah, I can get it under 7 pages... if I take out all the jokes." Not only is creating a superhero in six pages hard, but comedy often requires extra beats that a straight forward delivery wouldn't need.

...yet, people did it every month for years at MoviePoet.  


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Those from MP are a bit more disciplined. It wasnt as hard for me to trim it.
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Oddly enough I think 4 pages or less would've been easier for me to get my head around because I would've been thinking along the lines of just a very short comedy bit. 6 pages is starting to get into the space you need for an honest to God story. I suppose it's the difference between a 3 act beginning/middle/end vs one scene with a simple set-up/payoff. If it were only 4 pages, I wouldn't have attempted the story I went with, because it clearly wouldn't fit. But at 6 pages I could just fit in, or so I thought.

At least, those were the issues playing through my head. Everyone's got their own challenges.
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Well said Dan, though can't comment on the Faceoff but, not seen it.

Personally I've grown as a writer and I put a lot of that down to the selfless help I've received from the SS family.

Thanks all!


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Like I said, guys, if it's over, it's not the end of the world (in my eyes. Probably because I didn't set the limit). However, it will get sorted out in the comments and you can always re-upload your original vision when the contest is over, if you'd like. After all, this is only for fun. It doesn't need to be a trying, stressful experience. It's just for fun and to test our skills. That's all. =)


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So, even though I finished my first draft the first day, I was not able to submit in time due to my crazy job (which is why I wanted to enter the first draft, even though the story itself sucked).  I would like to know if I can still read and comment on the scripts as if I was actually participating?

Thanks.  Maybe I'll be able to get into the next one!


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Quoted from Jeremiah Johnson
So, even though I finished my first draft the first day, I was not able to submit in time due to my crazy job (which is why I wanted to enter the first draft, even though the story itself sucked).  I would like to know if I can still read and comment on the scripts as if I was actually participating?

Thanks.  Maybe I'll be able to get into the next one!


My understanding is that you can always read and comment on the scripts whether or not you entered, the only thing you can't do is vote for the order of the crappy mug "prize."

I know I read quite a few for the one I didn't enter, I just couldn't vote.

And I wish I knew that I could have kept it at 6.5 pages.  I really took out some stuff I didn't.

IF people like it, I will probably expand on it, up to say 10 or 12 pages.  I really don't know if people will like it or not.  I know quite a few people guessed mine last time, I don't think it'll be that easy this time.

I don't think I have any gory scenes at all!   It's a sad day when I can't murder anyone...

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I wanted to say 2 things:

1.  I think the page limit is important.  I am unhappy because 6 pages is barely enough time to set up a story, and a comedy on top of that is even harder.  Sure, you can do 1 or 2 page scripts, look at that Impact 50 limit of 2 pages.  

But, the quality of the story really gets hurt when you cut so much out.  The original story came in at 13 pages, so, I knew I had to cut a lot.  And I did.  When I got it to 8 pages, I really took a hard look.  7 pages was a killer.  Then I got it to 6 and a half.  I was gonna leave it there, b/c in theory, it didn't go over 6 pages, it wasn't a full 7, but, I thought I'd get dinged and didn't want that to be a problem too.

I barely got it to 6, but, as some others have said, their quality suffered too.  IF people like the cut version, I might do a longer version that I had in my mind.  I really have no idea if anyone will like it or not.  I have a feeling some will find it unfocused.  Trying to cram too much into those precious 6 pages.


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I wrote one, thought it was pretty good/funny-ish, and honed the shit out of it so peeps wouldn't pick it apart for typos, etc. Got it down to six pages too. I had it ready to go then decided (just before submission close, of course) to read over the rules one last time to make sure I was in the parameters of those rules...

Quote: "This isn't some redux of a previously existing character... You are creating a completely new character and letting them roam free and destroy the villains..."

Ooops... I fugged up! I took an (already) existing meme, gave him a back story, super powers, and had him take down some villains. I disqualified myself cause I wasn't paying attention... that'll learn me.

Anyway, the character was 'Pink Freud'. I had him take down a bunch of Gummy Whale poachers in a place called Candyland. He's a gumshoe detective, and (almost) every line he delivered was a mash-up of a Sigmund Freud quote with a Pink Floyd song lyric. The script was in the vein of 'Kung Fury'... hmm, now that I say that out loud, it's probably best I didn't submit, lol.

Anyway, I'll definitely try to read and comment on some tomorrow, but a mediocre facsimile of summer just arrived in my neck of the woods and I've got a shitload of yard projects on my bucket list. Best of luck to everyone!

@ Mark, so sad to hear of your loss...
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Quoted from Gum
I wrote one, thought it was pretty good/funny-ish, and honed the shit out of it so peeps wouldn't pick it apart for typos, etc. Got it down to six pages too. I had it ready to go then decided (just before submission close, of course) to read over the rules one last time to make sure I was in the parameters of those rules...

Quote: "This isn't some redux of a previously existing character... You are creating a completely new character and letting them roam free and destroy the villains..."

Ooops... I fugged up! I took an (already) existing meme, gave him a back story, super powers, and had him take down some villains. I disqualified myself cause I wasn't paying attention... that'll learn me.

Anyway, the character was 'Pink Freud'. I had him take down a bunch of Gummy Whale poachers in a place called Candyland. He's a gumshoe detective, and (almost) every line he delivered was a mash-up of a Sigmund Freud quote with a Pink Floyd song lyric. The script was in the vein of 'Kung Fury'... hmm, now that I say that out loud, it's probably best I didn't submit, lol.

Anyway, I'll definitely try to read and comment on some tomorrow, but a mediocre facsimile of summer just arrived in my neck of the woods and I've got a shitload of yard projects on my bucket list. Best of luck to everyone!

@ Mark, so sad to hear of your loss...


I would have entered that, shame.

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Good writers can write a story in one sentence if required. If your story isn't good enough to stand up in 6 pages then it's unlikely that adding any more will help it. Your idea either works or it doesn't.


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I will be reading every script- and marking them in a first for me; it's comedy so it's 'serious' for me lol - but I will not open any script that is over 6 pages.

Mine came in a half page over and took me an hour or so to make qualifiable. Sorry to be pedantic but rules is rules.

Mark, hope and your family can get through this sad time mate. Take care


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I just finished The Hit about five minutes ago. I will try to read some tomorrow.  

Now where's that celebratory drink?  



PS: Sorry to hear about your loss, Mark. Maybe comedy is just what you could use right now.


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Hey guys!

I'm in for your comedy OWC. I just couldn't resist. Look forward to reading the entries.

I used to hang around here and Movie Poet (RIP).

Yes, I'm a Beatles fan. Nowhere near the expert that Stevie is.

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It's been a long time since I've participated in a OWC and I'm looking forward to reading everyone's entries. Also, if you went past 6 pages then I'm going to consider your script disqualified. The guidelines were pretty open except for this one. Keeping my story to 6 pages was a real bitch, but it was a good challenge. Good luck everyone!


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I know what the stipulations said and it's up to each individual reader, but people shouldn't be punished for their scripts going over length, if that is the case. They put in the work and they tried hard, just like everybody else did. Just my take on it.


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Hey guys!

I'm in for your comedy OWC. I just couldn't resist. Look forward to reading the entries.

I used to hang around here and Movie Poet (RIP).

Yes, I'm a Beatles fan. Nowhere near the expert that Stevie is.

Gary


GAZZA! Good to see you back mate and I love your av pic!  No 4 humans have lived that have ever been as cool as those lads.


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Quoted from Sean
I know what the stipulations said and it's up to each individual reader, but people shouldn't be punished for their scripts going over length, if that is the case. They put in the work and they tried hard, just like everybody else did. Just my take on it.


I agree... I'm not gonna shit on somebody's script if they rolled a few lines over 6 pages... big deal, it's a writing exercise and supposed to be fun.
If you made the effort and entered I'll read it.


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I don't recall the guidelines saying approximately 6 pages. The length of the script was part of the challenge. I'm sure the people who went over 6 pages worked hard on their script...but the people who stayed within the guidelines worked harder.


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Last OCT OWC, Don let my script in even though it went over the page limit.He's a nice guy.  I was punished by the readers however. I think that's how this will go. Some people won't care and others will refuse to read.


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Gonna have to agree with those in favor of honoring the page length. For one, it's the only objective parameter in the guidelines. Hard to argue against it with a big fat 7 at the top of the page. Second, if you're less than a page over, you should be able to edit down to an even six with a little bit of effort (shoutout to Stevie). If you're over by several pages, your story might not be suited for six pages (except shoutout to DanC).

Plus I just can't help but feel like someone's gonna abuse the leeway just because they can. Call me cynical (I am), but fuck that.

I don't think it's in the spirit of the OWC to actively disqualify people, so I respect Sean's judgment on the matter. But like others have said, that is up to the individuals. In light of several members already on record for putting forth the effort to hit the mark, I'm not inclined to read entries that exceed it.


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Seems a lot of folk are a little anxious about this OWC thing. Personally, I'm still playing Prince. Might put something else on later, but for now our departed hero is still big news. And so he should be.

I saw him live quite a few times, Prince I mean. What a showman. Oh yes.

Nevertheless, for each their own.

Now, what's on the telly?

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Now, what's on the telly?


Game of Thrones is imminent.


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Game of Thrones is imminent.


Eh? What's that?

Oh. Sorry, I was confused. I'm sure I put something down somewhere. Ah well.

Imminent? Hang on, I'll have to look that up.

Ah. I was under the impression it was gonna be on about three week ago. And that book he's been promising. I was sure I still had a full head o' hair when GRRM first said 'Ahem, it'll be out soon.'

Having said all that... Both the telly one and the book one will be amazing, as they have up until now.

Hmm, I'm sufficiently distracted to forget about this OWC thing until, y'know, it actually starts. But I'm more intrerested in where that Prince album I lent to someone ages really is. I knew I should have wrote it down.

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I wrote one, thought it was pretty good/funny-ish, and honed the shit out of it so peeps wouldn't pick it apart for typos, etc. Got it down to six pages too. I had it ready to go then decided (just before submission close, of course) to read over the rules one last time to make sure I was in the parameters of those rules...

Quote: "This isn't some redux of a previously existing character... You are creating a completely new character and letting them roam free and destroy the villains..."

Ooops... I fugged up! I took an (already) existing meme, gave him a back story, super powers, and had him take down some villains. I disqualified myself cause I wasn't paying attention... that'll learn me.

Anyway, the character was 'Pink Freud'. I had him take down a bunch of Gummy Whale poachers in a place called Candyland. He's a gumshoe detective, and (almost) every line he delivered was a mash-up of a Sigmund Freud quote with a Pink Floyd song lyric. The script was in the vein of 'Kung Fury'... hmm, now that I say that out loud, it's probably best I didn't submit, lol.

Anyway, I'll definitely try to read and comment on some tomorrow, but a mediocre facsimile of summer just arrived in my neck of the woods and I've got a shitload of yard projects on my bucket list. Best of luck to everyone!

@ Mark, so sad to hear of your loss...


You did submit no? I hope so. This sounds funny. And I'm not sure if you disqualified yourself as Pink Freud sounds like a pretty original character to me. My understanding was you couldn't use an existing superhero.


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I thought existing superheroes were off limits too, but Pink Freud sounds original. I would have considered it acceptable...

I misread the brief first time round and got half way through an every batman actor ever drunken halloween night rampage, against anyone dressed up as their appropriate nemis's. Now that would have definitely not been acceptable


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No... like an egghead, I didn't submit. I have a 'Pink Freud' coffee mug and that's when the idea hit me... when I was having a cup o' Joe, at the time the rules came out. I wrote the script  last week, and just before deadline decided to Google how many people might know about this 'Pink Freud' character...

F*ck, he's all over the internet, t-shirts, cups, a band (I think), a myriad of websites. I honestly didn't know it was a huge meme out of control. I got all bummed out thinking I wrote about an existing (hugely popular) character and didn't really follow the challenge guidelines. I strayed from the rules previously (elevator OWC) and got a good ripping for it, lol.

It's all good. I'm content knowing I managed to write another short for my script locker. Ah, maybe I'll put it up after the OWC, cheers!
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I do believe that Don has posted all of the scripts, officially, so a big thank you goes out to him. We have 34 entries which is a great showing so thank you to all who entered. The master list can be found HERE.


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Excellent. I'm going to find my story and extol its virtues.


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Hey Mr. Blonde,
    Can we have a list of all of us who submitted a short so that we can try to figure out who might have done what?

I know I submitted one.

Dan


Please read my scripts:
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I'm interested in reading animation, horror, sci fy, suspense, fantasy, and anything that is good.  I enjoy writing the same.  Looking to team with anyone!

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Hey Mr. Blonde,
    Can we have a list of all of us who submitted a short so that we can try to figure out who might have done what?


Only Don has access to the list of who actually submitted. However, the names will be revealed on Friday.

If people want to come forward and say that they entered one (besides the people who already have, in this post), that's no issue. Guessing is always welcome, but please don't say what you actually wrote, yet (not to you, just a general message).


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I won't be able to guess out anyone -  every one I read is ren's. Seriously. It's like he sat and wrote all of them.
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It's a public holiday here today - April 25 is our sacred Anzac Day. so I have all day to read!

Its 4am now and am waiting in car for the Dawn Service. My daughter Abbey is with me. I'm wearing the shirt I wore at Gallipoli this time last year.  

Lest we forget..


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I just thought it'd be fun to try to guess who wrote what...

Oh well.  Although, so far, I can't figure out anything from the stories I've read so far...


Please read my scripts:
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I'm interested in reading animation, horror, sci fy, suspense, fantasy, and anything that is good.  I enjoy writing the same.  Looking to team with anyone!

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I do have two guesses so far. One strong guess about a script I didn't even read yet. Logline says it all. Could be wrong though.


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The guessing thread usually comes much later.


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I know, I know - that's why I didn't write my guesses.

Half way through, my top 3 so far

1 - Mother Nature's Joke
2 - Not Today, Gucci
3 - A Game Of Supers


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Thank you Equinox. I'll go through them.

I loved SuperMick - suggest everyone reads it.
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Okay, so when is it acceptable to reply to the comments made on your OWC?

And could someone please 'splain to me how the voting works?

Really enjoying this and having fun reading all the scripts.


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Quoted from Equinox
I know, I know - that's why I didn't write my guesses.

Half way through, my top 3 so far

1 - Mother Nature's Joke
2 - Not Today, Gucci
3 - A Game Of Supers


Gucci??  You gotta be kidding.  I couldn't get past page 3...

Haven't read the others.  Hey did you ever submit the one you sent me?

Dan


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Have started reviewing but just wanted to point out to perps that any low scores I give your script won't necessarily be for poor writing just purely on the comedy lol.

So don't curse me!

Have found 2 so far that are too long so have put them aside


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Quoted from Gum
Anyway, the character was 'Pink Freud'. I had him take down a bunch of Gummy Whale poachers in a place called Candyland. He's a gumshoe detective, and (almost) every line he delivered was a mash-up of a Sigmund Freud quote with a Pink Floyd song lyric. The script was in the vein of 'Kung Fury'... hmm, now that I say that out loud, it's probably best I didn't submit, lol.


Please post this. Sounds like fun. Pink Freud sounds like an original character too.

I'm also a huge Pink Floyd fan. Owned nearly every album by the time I was twelve, minus The Final Cut and the Barbet Schroeder soundtracks. Prefer early Floyd though (pre-Dark Side of the Moon). Not that the later albums aren't awesome.


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I like this challenge.

Yeah, there is hit and miss, but the turn out has been good. And it's enjoyable. Thirdly (note humour) this varies the OWC options. Fifthly I can count again.

I think we should do one of these per year.


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Quoted from Wes
Okay, so when is it acceptable to reply to the comments made on your OWC?

And could someone please 'splain to me how the voting works?

Really enjoying this and having fun reading all the scripts.


Hold off on replying to the comments on your thread until the names are revealed, which is in about a week, I think.  If you entered, you'll receive an email with a ballot for your voting.
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Quoted from James McClung


Please post this. Sounds like fun. Pink Freud sounds like an original character too.

I'm also a huge Pink Floyd fan. Owned nearly every album by the time I was twelve, minus The Final Cut and the Barbet Schroeder soundtracks. Prefer early Floyd though (pre-Dark Side of the Moon). Not that the later albums aren't awesome.


I agree, this sounds original.  I think he meant that he didn't want to see Batman called Matbam or something along those lines.  

I think if Peter Porker wasn't already a character, that might have even been okay.  I mean, a spider web-weilding pig, what's not to like?

So, yes, please post this.  I too, was a pretty big Floyd fan.  I won tickets to their concert in Toronto a long time ago.  So much fun!!

Dan


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Quoted from Ryan1


Hold off on replying to the comments on your thread until the names are revealed, which is in about a week, I think.  If you entered, you'll receive an email with a ballot for your voting.


True story, if this is your first attempt, you won't last a week.  Hell, I've entered two of these so far and I haven't lasted a week.  I'm not sure I'll ever  go a week without outing myself and acting like a fool...

Notice I said acting like and not an actual, there is a difference

Dan


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I'm interested in reading animation, horror, sci fy, suspense, fantasy, and anything that is good.  I enjoy writing the same.  Looking to team with anyone!

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I've read 22 so far...

Some hits, some ok and some dark dramas????

The hits so far for me as far as laughs goes...

SuperMick
Super Singles
Simply Super
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True story, if this is your first attempt, you won't last a week.  Hell, I've entered two of these so far and I haven't lasted a week.  I'm not sure I'll ever  go a week without outing myself and acting like a fool...

Notice I said acting like and not an actual, there is a difference

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Hey, Dan. What do you mean by not lasting a week? Someone comes and kills me? My script is taken down? No one comments on my script and it fades away to nothing?


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Hey, Dan. What do you mean by not lasting a week? Someone comes and kills me? My script is taken down? No one comments on my script and it fades away to nothing?


He means you won't last a week without making it clear that a certain script belongs to you, by replying to those who have left comments on your script.

Sometimes people getting a little excited when they get bad reviews and they feel the need to explain themselves before the week is out, so we all know who wrote it before the reveal... don't do it.


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Have read them all except for the 3 that were over 7 pages. I think this was one of the tougher challenges since I've been onboard here, what with the 6 page max and the mix of comedy and superhero theme.

But it made for very quick and easy reading!!!   Anyone need any extra thoughts on their script, feel free to PM me


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Quoted from irish eyes


He means you won't last a week without making it clear that a certain script belongs to you, by replying to those who have left comments on your script.

Sometimes people getting a little excited when they get bad reviews and they feel the need to explain themselves before the week is out, so we all know who wrote it before the reveal... don't do it.


Yep, that is exactly what I mean.  So far, I haven't been able to last the week yet.  I had to defend my piece.  Or at least explain the drug induced stupor I was in when I wrote it and explain why it seemed like a good idea.  

He's right, you SHOULDN'T do it.  I haven't been able to hold my cool.

And actually, that's about it.  You do die each time someone says something bad, and then it does fade into eternity, never to be heard from again.

Actually, so far, the newest one has gotten pretty decent reviews so far.  Figures, the one I didn't care for gets the best (for me) reviews).  It still isn't good, but, at least it's not overwhelmingly negative.

I had to cut so much out from mine that it lost so much of what I intended...

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34 Scripts read and accounted for...

Thanks to Sean and Don for all your hard work... I'm off to bed


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Yep, that is exactly what I mean.  So far, I haven't been able to last the week yet.  I had to defend my piece.  Or at least explain the drug induced stupor I was in when I wrote it and explain why it seemed like a good idea.  

He's right, you SHOULDN'T do it.  I haven't been able to hold my cool.

And actually, that's about it.  You do die each time someone says something bad, and then it does fade into eternity, never to be heard from again.

Actually, so far, the newest one has gotten pretty decent reviews so far.  Figures, the one I didn't care for gets the best (for me) reviews).  It still isn't good, but, at least it's not overwhelmingly negative.

I had to cut so much out from mine that it lost so much of what I intended...

Dan


Ah, well then, I'll be very quiet.


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I am about half way through.

This is an interesting review challenge - unlike any other OWC. Since it is a comedy OWC, for me a litmus test has been - did it make me laugh/chuckle? Several otherwise well-written ones have not.  Not quite sure what to make of them recommend/consider/pass. Clumsy way of saying - should I rate a just okay written script that made me laugh over a well written script that did not.  

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Done. I've read them all. Didn't comment on the last two that were over the page limit because I'd just be repeating what's already been said.

Comedy is pretty subjective, isn't it? I think SuperMick is an excellent example of how we all perceive things differently. I find myself trying to be conscious of cultural differences too. All the way down to the slang/language that's used.

A lot of interesting reads. Good stuff.


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Quoted from eldave1
I am about half way through.

This is an interesting review challenge - unlike any other OWC. Since it is a comedy OWC, for me a litmus test has been - did it make me laugh/chuckle? Several otherwise well-written ones have not.  Not quite sure what to make of them recommend/consider/pass. Clumsy way of saying - should I rate a just okay written script that made me laugh over a well written script that did not.  

Wil be mulling it over.  


For me, that choice is easy.  If it made me laugh, they did the job.  If not, they didn't.  It's a comedy.  Even if we don't appreciate that sense of humor (say low brow vs high brow) at least we can see if it's done well or not.  

So, no laugh, for me = pass.

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If you laugh at your own does that count  

Well, when I say laugh, a slight chuckle...sort of. Good enough for me. Others though have to make me howl with laughter to make the grade  


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Quoted from Reef Dreamer
If you laugh at your own does that count  

Well, when I say laugh, a slight chuckle...sort of. Good enough for me. Others though have to make me howl with laughter to make the grade  


Seems fair...

Right??

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If it made me laugh, they did the job.  If not, they didn't.  It's a comedy.  Even if we don't appreciate that sense of humor (say low brow vs high brow) at least we can see if it's done well or not.  

So, no laugh, for me = pass.

I don't know. I hated the movie Bridesmaids. Not my cup of tea at all, but just because I didn't find it funny doesn't mean it wasn't a comedy.

I have read a few of these, but not commented on any. At least not yet. Seems to me some people try to be funny in their prose, rather than what would be on screen. That to me doesn't work at all.


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Well, read all 34. Congrats to all the writers who entered. I liked a few of these. About five or six stood out as pretty darn good, but I have an idea what my final three will be. Some of these were just flat out bizarre, while others had a decent premise but lacked in execution. Kinda ran the gamut what went right and what went wrong. But a lot of peeps already pointed out that comedy wasn't their thing, myself included. But, as always, fun and a cool challenge.

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I finished up last night, mixed bag as always but was a little surprised by how how many were closer to drama than comedy, not a bad thing as they worked as Dramas but not necessarily in this OWC

Still great effort by all in getting done and in in a week, always fun

Now for the interesting part... The writer reveal and the voting!


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Iíve read about half so far, I will get through all of them before the week is out. So far Iíve been impressed and itís been great to have a comedy owc for a change. I think itís good to force writers out of their comfort zone every once in a while.

As for my own entry, itís getting the usual love/hate/kinda like/itís OK/I really donít understand it at all inconsistency mine always seems to generate lol! But I donít feel the need to come out and defend it. If people read it and get it, fine. If not, fine. Iím getting some good ideas for draft 2 and thatís all that matters to me.  


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I've got about 5 or 6 more to read...or try to read.  Several good efforts, many very poor efforts...a few little to no effort at all.

Very surprised at the lack of comedy on display, for the most part.  It's almost as if some peeps don';t know what comedy even is, which I find hard to fathom.  But then again, the theme of superhero or super power doesn't go hand in hand with comedy, IMO, which is why I didn't enter a script.

I was going to throw up a pisser, but decided not to piss peeps off with it.


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I've only read a few thus far. Only one genuinely made me laugh. I'm impressed with the variety though. OWC scripts can run a little repetitive depending on the genre/theme. For the most part, I think the writers made a good effort too.

My own script is a complete bust. I blew it with the last rewrite and realized it at the worst possible time: AFTER submitting but BEFORE the scripts were posted. By the time it was up, I was already over it. Whatever. Onward with the other scripts!


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It's almost as if some peeps don';t know what comedy even is, which I find hard to fathom.


That's why I didn't bother trying to do one.


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...a few little to no effort at all.


Says the guy who yet again bottled out of entering a script.


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It's almost as if some peeps don';t know what comedy even is, which I find hard to fathom.


I don't think that's a fair criticism. You might indeed know what comedy is, but that doesn't mean you'll be able to translate it onto the page. Comedy works different on the page than onscreen. Take a script that's a failed attempt at comedy. I think it's much more likely that the writer doesn't understand how comedy *works* than just flat out doesn't know they're supposed to make people laugh.

Comedy's fucking hard. I think it's a completely different art form from writing, even though the two can intertwine in a number of ways, and I swore off of it for that very reason (and out of respect for the comedians who do it). It's like hip-hop. It's music, but it's more than that, and a non-hip-hop musician would be foolhardy to think he could produce quality hip-hop just because he's a musician too. You listen to comedians in interviews, it's an entirely different way of thinking that goes into it.

For me, it's much, much easier to wrap my head around producing in the vein of Tarantino's work than Louis CK's work.


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As promised I have tried hard to get into the mindset the writer intended and enjoy what's on offer. I haven't always been able to manage it... but just because I don't like a certain brand of comedy doesn't mean that it isn't comedy. It just doesn't resonate with me.

Every writer that's entered... and I'm completely shocked and surprised (in a good way) at there being 34 entries... deserves a pat on the back for having a go. For trying to make us laugh, keep a smile on our faces, a big thanks from me. This has been the best OWC I've been a part of so far.


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I've read most of them all now. Will go back and comment on the last remaining few in a day or two.

Have read some interesting scripts and I've seen 3 or 4 stand outs, a couple of  'really out there' scripts, a couple of pissers... The variety has been quite good and being only 6 pages ( well most of them anyway) it hasn't been too hard to read the lot.

For my own script I have been receiving, on the balance, generally favourable comments which is heartening and surprising, for a script which I knew was underdeveloped and roughly edited.

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My apologies if my words were misinterpreted.

Comedy doesn't have to work to be comedy, but there has to be an attempt at making the entire script a comedy.  Many of these did not seem to do that, but maybe it's just me.

Dustin, trust me, I wanted to enter this so badly, but was so bummed by the theme of superheroes, there was no way I was going to submit a serious attempt.  As I said, I almost threw together a big old pisser, but plans changed Friday, and I decided it was for the better that I simply stayed out.

34 entries is great and I applaud each and every one...but as usual, it appears like the majority of those writers are not commenting, which sucks ass.


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were the perameters that this needed to be sidesplittingly funny?  that's usually when people try to write endless dick and fart jokes, or stupid pratfalls... which some obviously have.

the contest was to write a superhero comedy.  that can be interpreted many ways.  "comedy is subjective, blah blah." i know, just saying.


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Comedy doesn't have to work to be comedy, but there has to be an attempt at making the entire script a comedy.  Many of these did not seem to do that, but maybe it's just me.


It's not just you. Every script didn't have to be side splitting. Comedy itself is broken up into a multitude of genres Alternative, Dark, Deadpan, Spoof and a lot of others but there were at least 7 scripts that didn't attempt anything but depressing dramas.
It doesn't have to be a laugh from start to finish but at least show some attempt in the script to crack a smile.
An email went out before this started given the master list, it also put the 3 went that over to the bottom and  asked to read them if you wanted. Personally I think that is harsh considering some peeps need very little influence not to read  scripts. An email should also have said there are at least 7 scripts that didn't attempt any form of comedy don't read those either considering that was actual premise.
I personally read all 33 out of respect to those who took their time to enter, at the end every script should have 33 reads or less for those 3 that went over.
But we know it doesn't go way...

Ah well that's my rant for today


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Ah well that's my rant for today


Rant agreed with and appreciated!!!



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I'll keep my eye out for some of these "dramas." I did read FM, which some people called a drama... even a *good* drama (WTF?). I could see it torn up and rewritten from scratch as a drama, but as is, I found the idea to be a stretch. That's just one script though. No idea what the others are like.


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It has been a good challenge. Difficult to pull off.

I think when you have a topic like superheroes, and a six page limit, you have to get out the block quickly. In a feature you can take much longer - watch Groundhog Day and see how long it is before the big ticket funny scenes cut it.

We pretty much all agree there are various types of comedy. Some we like more than others, personal tastes. Some will be sketches, 'two men walk in a bar, one is a superhero' type scripts, which suits the criteria. Others will go for bigger stories. I would have been interested to see what would have happened if they also had to be low cost and filmable.

I know many don't share this, but when you have a six pager I often think it has to be low budget as you are clearly trying to appeal to low budget producers.

Mine has got the feedback it deserves, and whilst comments vary, I can accept its limitations - it has many. But that was the idea I had in a week, which is really five days max when things are taken into account.

Visual humour can also be difficult to get across on the page. In the UK there was a famous comedy called Fawlty Towers. In this, John Cleese does a German goose march through the bed and break fast he runs because some German guests have turned up. On the page this could come across as the opposite of funny, but in some ways it's one of the most immortal scenes from that brilliant series.

Likewise two men in a bar can be far more dynamic than comes across by the time expressions, intercutting, props etc are included.

All in all this has been a worthy challenge, alas one I didn't excel in.


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I've only read a few thus far. Only one genuinely made me laugh. I'm impressed with the variety though. OWC scripts can run a little repetitive depending on the genre/theme. For the most part, I think the writers made a good effort too.

My own script is a complete bust. I blew it with the last rewrite and realized it at the worst possible time: AFTER submitting but BEFORE the scripts were posted. By the time it was up, I was already over it. Whatever. Onward with the other scripts!



Sorry James.  It can be hard to devote so much time to something and then realize it's not gonna work.  

I have finished reading all of the scripts.  There were some good ones, I mean really good ones.  Some not so good, and some WTF did I just read ones.

I think the biggest surprise for me was the lack of comedy or superheroes in the short.  Some were dramas.  Some had barely a superhero at all.

I knew the superhero + comedy + 6 page limit was gonna be very very hard.  I had to basically load a pisser b/c I took everything original out of my story.  It sucked.   Although, some people seemed to like it.  It could have been so much more.  

I'm sure everyone can say the same thing, given the parameters.  I applaud everyone who had the guts to enter this very difficult OWC.  

My fav were:
Johnny come lately
Erection Man
Mother Nature's Joke
Googleman
Flying High Again  
Making the perfect hero
The talk

I liked some others, but, I thought those were the cream of the crop.

But, good job, and remember, today will end, tomorrow starts anew and can be the day that you take that next step with writing.  

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Comedy is a genre. There are different types of comedies within that genre.

Blonde didn't say it has to be funny from beginning to end. He said "comedy". It's either the funny situation or dialog. It could be a romcom or whatever, just fall under a comedy.
That's what the requirement was in my understanding and most (if not all minus two or three - I haven't read them all, can't tell) did fine I think.
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I know many don't share this, but when you have a six pager I often think it has to be low budget as you are clearly trying to appeal to low budget producers.



I also look for low-budget ones for some reason. I started training myself long time ago and can't stop. Although it's not been a requirement and can't be punishable.

Yeah, mine got the feedback it deserves as well.
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As promised I have tried hard to get into the mindset the writer intended and enjoy what's on offer. I haven't always been able to manage it... but just because I don't like a certain brand of comedy doesn't mean that it isn't comedy. It just doesn't resonate with me.

Every writer that's entered... and I'm completely shocked and surprised (in a good way) at there being 34 entries... deserves a pat on the back for having a go. For trying to make us laugh, keep a smile on our faces, a big thanks from me. This has been the best OWC I've been a part of so far.


Who are you and what have you done with our Dustin?  Space Phantoms must have broken through the barrier again.  Or is it the Pod People.  Damn them and their sleep shenanigans.

Seriously, that's nice Dustin.  There were a lot of decent scripts.  Like I have said elsewhere, Superhero genre + comedy + 6 page limit is very freaking hard.  I had to basically cut everything that made mine unique just to fit the page limit.  I hated my entry.  But, some seem to like it.

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I've read most of them all now. Will go back and comment on the last remaining few in a day or two.

Have read some interesting scripts and I've seen 3 or 4 stand outs, a couple of  'really out there' scripts, a couple of pissers... The variety has been quite good and being only 6 pages ( well most of them anyway) it hasn't been too hard to read the lot.

For my own script I have been receiving, on the balance, generally favourable comments which is heartening and surprising, for a script which I knew was underdeveloped and roughly edited.

Six months on SS is proving to be a wise investment in time and energy.



I'm glad that you're time on here has been good to you.  I know i've grown a lot too.  The people on here can be tough, very tough, but, it's better to hear it from us then to have your script tossed aside by a producer or anyone with money for the same reason.  

People will challenge you here, which is what each of us needs to get better.  "Yes" people never help you grow.  

If you want me (this goes for anyone) to take a closer look at their script, send me a PM or email and I will do so.

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It's not just you. Every script didn't have to be side splitting. Comedy itself is broken up into a multitude of genres Alternative, Dark, Deadpan, Spoof and a lot of others but there were at least 7 scripts that didn't attempt anything but depressing dramas.
It doesn't have to be a laugh from start to finish but at least show some attempt in the script to crack a smile.
An email went out before this started given the master list, it also put the 3 went that over to the bottom and  asked to read them if you wanted. Personally I think that is harsh considering some peeps need very little influence not to read  scripts. An email should also have said there are at least 7 scripts that didn't attempt any form of comedy don't read those either considering that was actual premise.
I personally read all 33 out of respect to those who took their time to enter, at the end every script should have 33 reads or less for those 3 that went over.
But we know it doesn't go way...

Ah well that's my rant for today


I agree with every word you said.  I think these "contests" should be open to people who contribute in some way.  It should be mandatory that if you're gonna enter, you have to at least read 75% of the entries.  I know school and life can limit what you can do, and if that is the case, I think they should tell us this.  I don't think anyone would get upset if we know the WHY you didn't read many, if any at all, but, it's like an absentee landlord.  No one likes them.  However, if we find out that our landlord is fighting cancer, well, that changes things.

I have read every story, including the ones that went over.  Once the comments started, they went from the bottom to the top, so, I had no clue which ones were on the "extended page count" list and which weren't.

Again, good luck to all who entered.

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It's only Tuesday. Still plenty of time for reading/commenting. I didn't enter but have read a dozen or so. Don't know how many I'll comment on. Maybe ones I like best.



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Comedy is like pizza. Everyone has a favorite.

I just figured this out: If you click on the "April OWC scripts are up" on the portal page you'll see the OWC entries in order.  And once you're at the list, clicking on the title will take you to the thread directly.
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Yeah, I had a lower budget in mind on mine as well.  Mine wasn't funny and leaned more in the Drama direction.  I didn't get it submitted in time, but will throw it in as soon as the voting for these are done.  I started another one on Thursday before the deadline that was going to be funnier (Gas Man - or Gastrointestinal Man) and will finish it and throw it in as well.  Might as well, some of you guys have been getting your short films produced and I made myself a promise to get something made this year, even if it means me filming/producing.

I'm going to read most/all of these as soon as I'm done reviewing Ashlie's TV pilot.  Then, I hope to laugh a little with some of these.  I too am surprised at the number of entries.  Good job everyone!


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Comedy is like pizza. Everyone has a favorite.

I just figured this out: If you click on the "April OWC scripts are up" on the portal page you'll see the OWC entries in order.  And once you're at the list, clicking on the title will take you to the thread directly.


Yep, that makes it real easy.  That's how I'm doing it.  No, not that!  See, I'm not funny.


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As I was just discussing with old mate Jeff, comedy can be a geographical thing too in that certain countries just dont get other countries humour (and its nothing to do with taste either).

A lot of American have huge trouble coming to grips with the British humour. And most American comedies, be it tv or movies are just not funny for some reason.

A good case is 'Friends'. I watched a couple of times and only really laughed at a few of Phoebe's lines. The rest was totally unfunny. Mind you, the cast were very bland actors. I also tried to watch Two and a half Men once to see what all the fuss was about.  Nope - totally unfunny. But I love other US shows like Drew Carey and King Of Queens.

Its all subjective I guess but nothing has ever surpassed UK comedy. Monty Python, The Two Ronnies, etc. And my favorite, Blackadder.


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As I just discussed with my old mate, Stevie, the only funny British comedy i can recall is the classic, Granddaddy of them all...

Benny Hill!!!  Man, my bud and I used to laugh our arses off at that.  Even my Dad used to love it, but every time my Mom "caught" him watching it, she was not happy.



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I work with a Brit.  He had me watch The Two Ronnies - Four Candles/Fork Handles.  Funny stuff there.


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The four candles/fork handles is the best sketch ever. Doesn't matter where you're from. Simple.


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Agreed.  Just watched it again.  In tears every time.


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Okay - I am done with all 34.

First - the six-page limitation sure made the review process easier and, at least for me, forced the honing of some writing skills - you really had to get to the point. I tend to over write sometimes and this exercise was great for tackling that skill set.

Second - from my own view and the others I have seen posted - comedy may easily be the most subjective of the genres. Stuff I found funny left others wanting and vice versa.

Third - kudos to all who entered.

I found a total of 3 scripts that I would recommend (no need in saying which ones at this point) and several others that I would grade as consider. A tough challenge indeed.


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Quoted from IamGlenn
The four candles/fork handles is the best sketch ever. Doesn't matter where you're from. Simple.


Link please.

I agree that humor, especially from across the pond, is quite different.  I do have some experience, like with Monty Python.  I still think "The Holy Grail" is one of the funniest movies I've ever seen, especially the vorpal bunny.  I had just started playing D&D and well, funny stuff.

I did get to watch some Benny Hill, but, the other one was funnier, and I wish I could recall the name.  Dave or David something...  It was many years ago.  Both were half hour shows and one was on after the other.  

I can recall one skit where a guy goes into a confessional to confess his sins, suddenly, the priest comes storming out and pulls the dude from the confessional and starts beating him, then takes off his belt and starts whipping him.  All over because he stole a loaf of bread or something small like that.  Then he looks at the other people waiting in line and says "who's next?"  Needlessly to say, no one went in.

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That was Dave Allen, Dan. Another great comedian, an Irish one at that lol


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Quoted from stevie
That was Dave Allen, Dan. Another great comedian, an Irish one at that lol


Yep, now I remember, Dave Allen At Large, right?  I used to watch that, but, I was really young and I had to go to bed early those days.  

Funny stuff.

I'm not gonna write a lot.  I'm in a really bad news and I don't know what to do about it...  

Anyways, thanks for those cool memories.

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Oh, Dave Allen, I liked him.

I rememeber a sketch where two funeral parties, with coffins, race each other to the graveyard. Quality.


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Quoted from IamGlenn
The four candles/fork handles is the best sketch ever. Doesn't matter where you're from. Simple.


Ronnie Barker was the master of comedy. Ronnie Corbett was great too and died just recently. I first watched that sketch as a kid but it's still good enough to make me laugh today. I know, because I saw it recently.


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https://youtu.be/gi_6SaqVQSw

There you are, Dan. I envy you if this is your first time watching it.

https://youtu.be/y0C59pI_ypQ
https://youtu.be/lIaXSBSQ0W0

Also, love these two. Ronnie Corbett really was something else.


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Reading scripts is subjective and comedy is subjective, thus combining the two is very subjective indeed. Iíve found with the comments the Brit members do seem to have taken to my comedy more than those from the other side of the pond so comedy has geographical elements as well. Itís been a hell of a challenge this OWC but I echo Dustinís statement in that itís been one of the most rewarding to read. I give a pat on the back to all those who entered and tried their best to meet the criteria.

I just want to mention something else if I may. The folks who read all the scripts (myself included), especially those who fly through the lot in a short period of time, you can see in their comments they get tired and less patient with scripts as they go along. They want the story and comedy to scream out at them at page 1 by the time theyíve read 20+ scripts! Not having a go, thatís fine Ė we all only have so much time to do this and we are all human. Just imagine then, when you are entering scripts in a competition or sending it off to a production company; this is what you are up against. A bunch of guys who have hundreds, if not thousands of scripts to go through and their patience is gradually running thin, no matter how hard they try to stay objective.

I think itís important to realise this and try to have as much impact in the title, logline and first few pages as you can. I also think itís important to realise if they do pass on it, not to be too disheartened. If that was the first script they read of the day, it may have been a different story. So take heart fellow writers when such things happen, and donít give up.



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EDIT - Oh and Fork Handles is comedy genius!


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Quoted from MarkRenshaw

The folks who read all the scripts (myself included), especially those who fly through the lot in a short period of time, you can see in their comments they get tired and less patient with scripts as they go along. They want the story and comedy to scream out at them at page 1 by the time theyíve read 20+ scripts! Not having a go, thatís fine Ė we all only have so much time to do this and we are all human. Just imagine then, when you are entering scripts in a competition or sending it off to a production company; this is what you are up against. A bunch of guys who have hundreds, if not thousands of scripts to go through and their patience is gradually running thin, no matter how hard they try to stay objective.


Excellent point from Mark.

Brit TV humor I've enjoyed (watching in North Carolina):
"A Bit of a Do"
Fitz in "Cracker"



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Think I only bailed on two. And I felt bad about it cause I don't like doing that, but from my pov I could see this wasn't going anywhere different than the few pages I did read. And yes it is obvious that people do get bogged down the further in they/we go. But inteally tried to give everyone a fair shake, and although most of my comments were very short and sweet I did read your entire script. Just didn't have time to get into details because of the amount of scripts I read. Kudos to anyone else who read all 34!


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I'm still shocked that there's 34 entries. Open only to board members - and there's 34?? Everyone bailing on the challenge before it was announced and then it's still 34!
I have no idea how that's possible.

Did anyone submit several?
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Kham - thankfully I only submitted one. Had I realised about the villain option earlier on this may have inspired another.

34 is a cracking turn out under the circumstances

In terms of quality I don't think I'm able to compare with previous OWC's , it's so different. But I would once again comment that there are some really good ideas that with time and feedback could be developed but in the rush haven't quite hit the mark.


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Think I only bailed on two. And I felt bad about it cause I don't like doing that, but from my pov I could see this wasn't going anywhere different than the few pages I did read. And yes it is obvious that people do get bogged down the further in they/we go. But inteally tried to give everyone a fair shake, and although most of my comments were very short and sweet I did read your entire script. Just didn't have time to get into details because of the amount of scripts I read. Kudos to anyone else who read all 34!


It is probably a fair microcosm of how scripts are read by the industry - better catch then quick.


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I think I bailed on 3 or 4, but, in all fairness, most have bailed on those same.  

I try to read each one.  I try to put the merits of each one in a fair position.  I do agree that if you read a really good, or bad one, the next one is looked at in a different light.  

But, just as we are (hopefully) professional when we write our stories, we should have that same professionalism when we "grade" each others work.  After all, I wouldn't want a harsh no help review.  I know when i go out, I give a pretty detailed reason why.  

Some works were just too drug fueled or avant guard to follow.  I can appreciate "Meshes in the Afternoon" with the best of them, or even "La Jette", but, if it's too abstract, I can't even follow the symbolism.

I do think that's a bit lost today on the youth.  Before technology was capable of making a movie like Avatar, both writers and filmmakers/producers had to rely on cunning to bring a story to life.  Not just pay some nerd a gazillion D and D character sheets.

Oh, I watched the skits.  Some of the humor was lost on me.  I did find all 3 to be funny, but, for me, the third one was by far, the most I have laughed in a while.  Especially the dongs comment.  Very funny.  

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Just finished the lot, what happens now? Do we get an email address to send votes to or something? Sorry to ask stupid questions but it's my first time doing this so I've no idea.

Also well done on the scripts to everyone. I didn't pullout of any of them (even the couple of absolutely insane ones) and glad for it, a full spectrum of comedy right there.


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An Email will come out to the writers who are eligible to vote in a few days, you then submit your picks


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Brilliant, cheers Anthony!


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finished. I haven't commented on all of them due to various reasons such as repeating what others have said, but I have been through them all.

Been an interesting OWC.

Not sure I could guess a single writer of these.


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Quoted from Reef Dreamer
Not sure I could guess a single writer of these.


I've got a sneaking suspicion which one is mine.


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I could guess every one of them!

Now, if those guesses are correct or not... That's the hard part.


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I know one of the writers because I read their script before they submitted it. Other than that, I stopped guessing writers years ago after SimplyScripts blew up and 30-50 people started entering the OWC. It stopped being fun with so many people involved, and having taken some time away from the site, I don't recognize half the current members' writing styles anyway at this point.


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Today one of the writers send me his guess and he was absolutely right! Just one guess... That made me very happy for some reason.

I can't even try guessing any of you.

Johnny might be rendevous'
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In terms of quality I don't think I'm able to compare with previous OWC's , it's so different.


I liked this OWC so much better. It was very different. I wouldn't care to read about superheroes but I was having lots of fun with those. And I think I pinned a lot for recommend - many were really good.

The page limit helped too. Maybe even psychologically, but it's good to know that any given script will end on p6. I'm kind of being honest, sorry)
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I think Glenn wrote Supermick, and I know one other author because he told me(but it was pretty obvious anyway.)  Gonna try and get through the rest by tomorrow.
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Pretty sure Dustin or RV wrote SuperChav. 3 others I know only because the author told me lol.

Another disappointing turnout review wise. Obviously no one is obligated to read them all but the numbers tell the tale once again.

This turned out to be a pretty hard challenge for a few perps with the comedy genre. Most had very good writing and an ok story but just weren't funny. Involving a superhero made it tougher too, so, what on paper looked fairly easy turned out to be a real challenge for quite a few.


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Pretty sure Dustin or RV wrote SuperChav. 3 others I know only because the author told me lol.

Another disappointing turnout review wise. Obviously no one is obligated to read them all but the numbers tell the tale once again.

This turned out to be a pretty hard challenge for a few perps with the comedy genre. Most had very good writing and an ok story but just weren't funny. Involving a superhero made it tougher too, so, what on paper looked fairly easy turned out to be a real challenge for quite a few.


I actually think it isn't fair to not get the reads.  I mean, one of them had 9 reviews.  That's not right, even if they did go over by 4 lines.

I don't know why people are allowed to submit entry after entry and not do the civil thing?  I mean, if someone is busy (like with school) or has something happen (like with Mark) or even says sorry, I'm really busy right now,  or something, even a 1 line, I read this and their score, but, I think if you submit, you should read at least 50% of them.  

This site is to help others.  Everyone has an opinion.  Anyone can comment.  it doesn't mean it's right or whatever, but, they can at least try.  

I'd rather try and be wrong, LEARN from that lesson, then do nothing at all.

Just my rant, sorry.

Dan

ps, I'm not complaining about my story.  I've had a fair amount of reads, so, this isn't a sour grapes post, and when the names come out, you will see that's true.  I feel bad for some others who put a lot of hard work in and haven't had many comments at all.  


Please read my scripts:
http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-series/m-1427564706/

I'm interested in reading animation, horror, sci fy, suspense, fantasy, and anything that is good.  I enjoy writing the same.  Looking to team with anyone!

Thanks
Dan
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I actually think it isn't fair to not get the reads.  I mean, one of them had 9 reviews.


I really do feel bad for having a go at Equinox now, especially when he's commenting and hasn't even entered...apologies again!!!!


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It happens every OWC, but much less so now that only board members are allowed to enter. It was crazy for awhile when people promoted it in social media. We'd get a lot of people who entered, but never read one single script.

Some people who read and comment on the scripts and give solid thoughtful reviews often delete their comments from the scripts where the writer didn't read anything.

One time Don put an asterix by scripts entered where the writers were participating in reading. I thought that was extremely helpful. Wish that feature was back, but perhaps it takes up a lot of time on Don's part.

I will try to read some on Sunday. Until then, I'm just swamped with all kinds of stuff. Good stuff! So I want to enjoy it too.  


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I think Glenn wrote Supermick


I wish!